Comments | caera1996: ST XI Fiction: Ochlophobia

caera1996

ST XI Fiction: Ochlophobia

Feb 06, 2010 23:38

So...I decided to do something completely different, and write a story that features Chekov. I've never written his character before, so if anyone has any criticisms, I'd appreciate hearing them. After some deliberation, I decided not to write the accent, but focused on his syntax...no contractions, word choice, stuff like that...instead. Was that ( Read more... )

mccoy, chekov

Comments 11

katmarajade February 7 2010, 05:25:59 UTC

Oh, I really enjoyed this! Very sweet! I think you made the right call on the accent-- I don't really like it when his accent is overly written out, other than maybe a word here or there for fun. Or when people write him using super broken English-- you were spot on with this:his communication-limiting accent - were not issues as far as he was concerned. He’d learned quickly that the young were often overlooked, and an accent can be thickened or scaled back to suite the perception of situation, and didn’t hinder his ability to articulate his position, as many were mistakenly wont to believe.
And I liked grumpy Bones pulling out his psych training. I thought you balanced well the genius youth bit-- that he's old enough and fully capable for his position, but that there are still some things in life that, no matter how smart you are, you just can't get save through experience.

caera1996 February 7 2010, 13:17:48 UTC

Hi there! Thank you so much! I'm really glad you thought I reached a good balance there. Thanks for taking the time to comment.

secretsolitaire February 7 2010, 17:43:24 UTC

Aw. I enjoyed this -- I love how Bones figured out what was going on and handled it so sensitively. *cuddles Chekov*

caera1996 February 8 2010, 00:04:45 UTC

Thank you very much!

sororexitium February 7 2010, 18:33:56 UTC

This was so sweet. I love the interactions between McCoy and Jim, and McCoy and Chekov. You are so good at envisioning everything, and I'm soooo jealous. You really made those situations come to life and the way you wrote the dialogue...this was really just like watching a deleted scene from the movie.

Fabulous. Just fabulous.

caera1996 February 8 2010, 00:10:39 UTC

Oh my gosh, I'm blushing over here...I just don't know what to say to that! Thank you so much -- I'm really glad you liked it!

spockchick February 10 2010, 18:49:56 UTC

I've blundered over here from Spock/Uhura and just wanted to say that story was just lovely. Really sensitive and touching. I am a huge McCoy fan and am sure he would have done just this.

caera1996 February 10 2010, 18:52:27 UTC

Thank you very much! And thank you for taking the time to comment!

aislinamara March 1 2010, 15:48:24 UTC

Okay. A: I loved McCoy in this: "You or me?" I love that they're taking care of Chekov.
B: THANK YOU for not doing the accent! It boggs down the story and distracts from plot, unless the writer is the all time master of writing dialects. Your method of portraying Chekov's voice was perfect; it gave enough of Chekov's speech patterns that I could hear his voice in my head while I read it, but it distract me from everything else.

This was a wonderful little ficlet, in my opinion...which admittedly doesn't mean much...but you have a new fan-girl at the very least. Trust me, I usually don't put this much effort into my comments.

caera1996 March 2 2010, 01:05:58 UTC

Oh, thank you so much! And don't be silly...your opinions mean a lot to me, especially since you've taken the time to share them.

I'm glad you think I made the right choice when it comes to Chekov...so much of his character is tied up in his accent, I was worried it wouldn't work.

I look forward to hearing your opinions on anything I write!