X-men Fan Fiction: The Drowning Men

[buzzylittleb]

The Drowing Men: The next part of the vampire!Kurt au, which is in desperate need of a name of funkiness.
It began with Once Bitten and continued with Twice Shy and Roses Mixed With Blood.
Words: around 7100, which is a lot for me.
Rating: No idea, mate. There's some swearing and some violence. Not for the babies, so PG13 or wahtever system we'

Comments

[shadowkitty]

Ooh this is very classic horror movie - of the 'we're stuck out in the sticks & the locals don't look friendly' variety (a favourite genre of mine) *bounces happily* The movie with the minivan is the original version of Texas Chainsaw Massacre, & I can think of far worse things to be influenced by!

[buzzylittleb]

Oh thank you God, a review at last!

So you likey? I thought this might just be up your street. The one thing I'm not going to do with the whole vampire thing, is have Kurt mooching around perpetually moaning about his lot in (un)life, ala Anne Rice...

You know there's a coda to this? It has Betsy Braddock in it. And more of the whole creep!fest thing with it, though there's also a huge does of Rachel doing crazy things with her ginormous knowledge of canon (tm). ;-)

[flying_anteater]

This would make his sensei proud if only sensei was not an immortal Japanese demon with a taste for hijacking bodies and would probably have been cheering on the bite boys at the sidelines like the soccer-mom from hell.

Whoa. Imagery.

I like Logan’s bitchiness towards the end. He can’t be nice guy all the time, even if he does love like the Elf.

This could probably stand to see a beta, some of the sentences were hard to read, and the dream in the beginning sounds like it started from one POV, but then you changed it and missed a few pronouns. But on the whole it was an exciting, creepy story. I especially like how Kurt is developing, and easing into his new life.

[buzzylittleb]

This could probably stand to see a beta, some of the sentences were hard to read, and the dream in the beginning sounds like it started from one POV, but then you changed it and missed a few pronouns

You are terrifyingly close to the truth, there. I still have a copy with it all in first person, the dream sequence and an initial Kurt monologue (that was the bit that sucked). So, bugger, I don't know how many times I read that through, but bugger, I still missed pronouns? *looks at feet*

The reason I don't have a regular beta has a lot to do with my less pleasant character traits... though I did get torakowalski to beta a dS fic for me, I just neglected to tell her it was death!fic and there were tears before bedtime. Not that Tora didn't do a wonderful wonderful job.