Comments | burningqueen: Bros Before Hoes

burningqueen

Bros Before Hoes

Sep 16, 2008 16:23

Title: Bros Before Hoes
Fandom: Supernatural
Characters/Pairings: Jessica, Sam, Dean. Sam/Jess.
Genre: drama, angst, horror
Rating: PG-13ish
Status: 2,870 words. One-shot. Complete.
Disclaimer: I do not own Supernatural at all and no profit is being made from this story. Also, all dialog used herein was written by Eric Kripke, not me.
Author's Note: This ( Read more... )

!public post, tv: supernatural, fandom: fanfiction, sometimes i write stuff

Comments 9

burnutica September 17 2008, 01:19:36 UTC

That was great! I could picture everything! I'm pretty sure that was going through her head all through the episode.

burningqueen September 17 2008, 02:09:34 UTC

Oh, thank you very much!

broken_lullaby September 17 2008, 02:36:42 UTC

I think I can bet she was thinking something like this during the episode. Poor Jess. I like this, getting a little into her own thoughts, and then her listening in on them - ohh sneaky Jess!

Great job! : )

burningqueen September 17 2008, 02:47:52 UTC

thank you very much!

_almostparadise September 17 2008, 03:58:44 UTC

Yay! You finished it!

-Aww, the whole beginning part about Sammeh being a good bf made me happy. :)

-I like how you emphasized the difference between how open Sam and Jess were about their family/pasts.

-I miss Sam's huge curvy knife! It is totally kickass!

-The ending was nicely done, especially the last line -- gives me a kind of eerie feeling...

burningqueen September 17 2008, 12:49:36 UTC

I did!

Well, you know he would be a good boyfriend.

& you also know he didn't tell her anything at all.

OMG IKR?

thanks. I was quite proud of it.

ily kathy!! ♥

nohara_megami September 17 2008, 06:09:38 UTC

Interesting insight (and somewhat accurate to my own personal canon) into Jessica's mind. I liked it! :D

burningqueen September 17 2008, 12:49:48 UTC

thanks!

neb92 September 18 2008, 01:44:09 UTC

Really good! I actually really like this, and from the little we know about Jess, I can so see her acting like this =) I just like the whole concept ^.^

My only problem with it is the emotion involved, I mean, at the end it's as if she's just so... Calm. She'd have been freaking out, some man broke into her home and somehow moved her without touching her, break laws of physics, etc., etc. She'd have really been freaking out, you know?

Also, if you heard your mentally-stable boyfriend talking about ghosts and poltergeists, you'd think there was something wrong with him, no questions asked, you wouldn't just say, "Oh, his family's screwed up."

Other than that, everything was perfect; no bad grammar, no noticeable spelling mistakes, nada =) I really enjoyed it.