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[buiochas_le_dia]

author buiochas_le_dia
title: Keep it, watch it change.
rating: R
pairing: JA/JP
feedback: comment. my last story finished with next to no commentary and it makes a writers life hard. so if you hate it/love it/like it just fine, please let me know.
disclaimer: i don't own the boys.
author's note: it’s a different style.

Comments

[chatona]

I think I like this.. The style reminds me of what I associate with 'high literature', not always easy to read or to understand, but beautiful in it's own way. And it's definitely beautiful!

Parts of it have a certain breathless quality to them and overall, everything fits and leaves a wonderful impression. I wish we'd read things like this in class *sulks*

[buiochas_le_dia]

aw thank you so much.
i felt like i was taking a risk with this piece simply because everything is between the lines.

[popmusicjunkie]

It seems slightly different than your usual style of writing.
But it's good.
I like it.

[buiochas_le_dia]

yeah it's definitely different, but new is good sometimes. :D

[2sexyboys]

It is different, but in a good way. Like breathing it all in. Thanks

[buiochas_le_dia]

thank you! i like your icon.

[crimsonsenya]

I'm quite tired at teh moment so I had some difficulties following what was really happening in the story. But I read a second time right away and everything made sense. The second person narration is a bit tricky and I don't usually like it, but I think you pulled it through well. The end coda was my favourite part. Your language was very beautiful, somehow fragile.

[buiochas_le_dia]

thank you very much. i actually despise second person myself, so i forced myself to write in it to get the perspective. thanks for re-reading. : )

[kliqzangel]

Very nice... loved the imagery you created.