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FIC: Eleven Hours ~ Chapter Four

Jul 18, 2012 23:43

Title: Eleven Hours
Author: bugs
Genre: Suspense, Drama, Romance
Rating: T
Word Count: 4,800
Timestamp: Fourteen hours, eighteen minutes

A/N: Can days start having 48 hours please, thanks! Too much going on! And thanks to aussie for keeping this straight. Hopefully.

( Trust no pretenders, those who claim they have heard the word of the dying leader and will follow. Only those anointed by the Lords of Kobol, under the dark cloak of our Queen, Persephone, shall serve the dying leader, so that all humanity may feast on the milk and honey on Earth. )

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Comments 17

afrakaday July 20 2012, 01:19:06 UTC

Suspenseful and fun. Han is a great character and I love how she sees straight through Tory's shadiness. Very cool that this chapter sheds a little more light on Mac, too.

bugsfic August 10 2012, 04:29:04 UTC

Han is a great character and I love how she sees straight through Tory's shadiness.

But it's funny how she's suspicious of the wrong thing! :D

I love using OC. Make me feel like a 'real' writer for a minute or two!

shikabane_mai July 31 2012, 21:25:49 UTC

Ugh, this is so good. I'm loving the mysteries, the outside perspective, the looks into the intimate life of A/R. The fact that Han thought Adama was sleeping with other women was hilarious. Can't wait to see who took Roslin.

bugsfic August 10 2012, 04:34:00 UTC

I love reading mysteries, but it's a bit unnerving trying to write one! Let's see if I can pull this off!

The fact that Han thought Adama was sleeping with other women was hilarious.

It's definitely fun to play with how darn guilty everyone would look to an outsider!

Can't wait to see who took Roslin.

Finally got my act together and posted another chapter! All is (sort of) revealed!

nvgvup August 11 2012, 07:26:05 UTC

I love the web you've woven. You really capture what feels like a natural investigation trajectory. A lot of authors jump ahead, make the detectives so brilliant that they come to conclusions that aren't possible given the info they have. But I feel like this detective is going at a pace that makes sense and every conclusion she comes to seems appropriate to the information she had. Nicely done.

Love Bill defending himself about sex with Laura. "--it's her choice."
We all know you're a gentleman, Bill!

bugsfic August 13 2012, 06:22:41 UTC

A lot of authors jump ahead, make the detectives so brilliant that they come to conclusions that aren't possible given the info they have. But I feel like this detective is going at a pace that makes sense and every conclusion she comes to seems appropriate to the information she had.

So many times in the series, I wondered about the poor citizens of the Fleet and what little information they must have. It just seemed like a fun idea to give someone little pieces of Our Heroes lives and see what they could make of it.

I find the Grand Leap detectives to be so unrealistic. And frankly more fun to have these poor cops befuddled by Bill's well-intended roadblocks.

We all know you're a gentleman, Bill!

I'm always struck by his Sad Panda face as he tells Saul he'll be with the president. Hardly a man heading to sexy times! He just finds so much to be feel guilty about!

lady_classa October 24 2012, 22:24:36 UTC

Just found this awesome fic! Love it!
I gotta say, the whole chapter was really great but (and excuse me if this sounds weird)- the condom part was so smart....!!!! for lack of a better word....

Loooove your fics.

bugsfic October 25 2012, 06:50:01 UTC

the condom part was so smart....!!!!

The things you learn for your characters in fanfic! I'd seen it in other Cancerfics, but it struck me as a wonderfully guilty looking touch for the unaware detective. :D

Glad you're catching up. I don't feel as slack if readers are still chugging along.