When Heroes Go Down (They Go Down Fast) 2/12

[buffyaddict13]

Title: When Heroes Go Down (They Go Down Fast) 2/12
Author: buffyaddict13
Rating:  a strong R for language and a lot of violence.  some of it's fairly gory. sorry folks. the end of the world isn't a shiny happy place.
Characters/Pairings: sam, dean, andy, OCs. Gen.
Summary: The war is at hand. it’s demon against man and we’re losing the fight. the

Comments

[indysaur]

YOU ARE KILLING ME SO DEAD. I don't even...I don't know where to start. You seriously have a gift for constructing original characters. They're so hard to pull off without seeming like crutches to move the plot along, or making them ciphers but you do it with such ease, it's startling.

Izzy, her matter of factness, her non sequiters, make her a character to love rather than just a plot device used to detect demons. I have mad love rocking for Izzy. Even with Patrick, within just this one part, you made his death mean something. I love that you used him to show the utter inability and lack of preparation of the government/military; I love that he's just another broken man trying to survive, this is all so incoherent but I am so in awe.

The progression is so believable, and your dialogue feels true to these characters, feels true full stop. I am on the edge of my seat and will be eagerly anticipating more.

[buffyaddict13]

hey girly!

You seriously have a gift for constructing original characters. They're so hard to pull off without seeming like crutches to move the plot along, or making them ciphers but you do it with such ease, it's startling.

*blinks*

thank you so much! *grins* i'm glad you think so. i try. i like to put OCs around dean and sam because it's fun to observe them from an outsider's POV. i'm just relieved you can stand izzy (and patrick).

i liked patrick. i was a little sorry to see him go, but you're right, his purpose was to show how unprepared everyone was.

I am on the edge of my seat and will be eagerly anticipating more.
*claps with joy* thank you muchly. um...i guess i better write some more then.

*hurries off*

[estei]

I tried really hard to think of some coherent feedback... but I can't, I'm sorry sweetie, but I just can't be coherent and sensible about this story. I love the shift between the present and Sam's recent past, the tension and the horror of the situation build so well. And the introduction of Patrick was inspired and his character added to the tension in such a believable and awesome way. And Sam's breakdown, telling them that he's only going to stay alive long enough to help them, his missing eye and Dean's leadership and attemps to keep everyone together and safe.... I just, I don't even know. You are blowing my mind with this fic.

[buffyaddict13]

estei! sweetie!

*waves*

i'm glad you're still liking this. *sweeps up brain, returns to you* i wanted to explore how it would be for dean to be a leader instead of a follower. and this sounds weird, but sometimes i forget sam lost an eye and i have to rewrite something to fix it. poor sam.

thank you so much for reading my fic. <3

[buffyaddict13]

hey you.

i just wanted to poke you see how you are. i hope you're doing okay. i haven't seen many posts from you lately and just wanted to check in.

*checks in. looks around.* nice place you have here.

okay. i gotta get back to pretending to work. i send you hugs, though. -----> *hug* see? :-D

[estei]

Hey you, back! I love being poked! Er, the internet way, anyway. I know, no posts from me. Sam is still being an impossible little bitch in Spoonful and now even Dean is getting in on the action. Plus, I have so much schoolwork I need to be working on right now, which means of course that I have been going through Refur's ficlist and rereading everything.

How are you??

*hug back*

[reallythateasy]

"Me," Sam says softly. "I think about death all the time. All the people I killed. And now I just want to kill me." His smile turns bright and bitter. "And I will. I’m just waiting. I’ll help you as much as I can, but then I’m done. I’m done."

I just feel so bad for Sam throughout this entire part, his memories of what he's done while under the influence is so horrible. And just that one part above, how his smile turns all bright and bitter when he's talking about when the time will come and he will be able to kill himself.

That scene in the house with the crazy lady, ahh I just need to reiterate...I will never live in a world of your making!

Wonderful, creepifying job!

[buffyaddict13]

That scene in the house with the crazy lady, ahh I just need to reiterate...I will never live in a world of your making!

my dear, if i put you in a world of my making it would have fluffy clouds and kitties and sam and dean to meet your every wish. i would *not* put you in this world. no way. but i'm glad you're liking the story and i'm thrilled you find the world creepy.

Wonderful, creepifying job!

oooh! i love the word creepifying! may i use it? *feels giddy over new word*

thank you so much for reading, hon. :-]

ps. i'm dense. i finally realized your OMG icon is from buffy. that is just hilarious. is that from the ep where they all lost their memories?

[reallythateasy]

Ooh, can I sign up now for that new world? I make up random words a lot, most of the time not even noticing they don't exist. Feel free to use it and often.

Is that from the ep where they all lost their memories? Yeps, it's from Tabula Rasa. I loved that episode so much, I think I have wip based during that episode somewhere on my hard drive.

[overstreets]

I really want to give you this awesome, intelligent-sounding review about how wonderfully thought-out and characterized this whole thing is, but all I can do is FLAIL AROUND EVERYWHERE. *flappy hands all over the place* Just, omg. For one, your original characters are perfect. Usually I find them really hard to keep track of, but not yours. Your characterization of Sammich is spot-on. It's so Sam(mich). His guilt is palpable. And Dean. Dean, even after everything, is still so Dean. His concern for his brother really shines through even though they have no real emo chat scenes together.

OMG DISEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEASE *runs around everywhere*

♥ !!!

[buffyaddict13]

hiya hon!

*flails with you*

i'm flailing because i'm so excited people are actually reading my fic. *and* because you like it so much. i'm so glad you like the OCs! *beams* they can be pretty tricky to write.

you think my sammich is spot on? *twirls you* thank you so muchly!

*runs around everywhere*

it's okay. you're safe now. you can rest a bit if you want.

*hugs*

[lostandalone22]

This is really amazing. I love how much you're making Sammy suffer and you describe it so well. He's so tormented.

And, that Patrick dude better calm down or Dean better shoot him.

[buffyaddict13]

*beams*

thank you hon! and yes, dean did shoot patrick at the very end. can't have anything bad happen to andy!

*hugs sam*