Fighting Stance, Chapter two

Sep 21, 2013 19:16

Fighting Stance
Chapter 2

by Brit ColumbiaFandom: FAKE ( Read more... )

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anonymous September 22 2013, 02:37:33 UTC
I think something might be wrong with the post? You have a big empty gap. Then you have Dee trying to get Ryo to put on the Gi, but Ryo was wearing it in the earlier section. There's also no spacing on the second part.

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brit_columbia September 22 2013, 02:42:42 UTC
Thanks-- I've been having so much trouble with my computer today. I should never have given a specific time to post. I got too rushed and stressed and then my computer, or maybe my internet, kept refusing to cooperate, and I couldn't fix things. I think it's maybe fixed now, though.

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anonymous September 22 2013, 03:03:15 UTC
It looks fine now. I can't decide how I want this fic to go. There are so many hot possibilities.

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brit_columbia September 22 2013, 04:13:48 UTC
It looks fine now. That's a relief! I was tearing out my hair for a while there.

It could go in several possible consecutive directions! After all, they've got all night. Unless someone (*cough*'Roger'*cough*)shows up unexpectedly...

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awieatti September 22 2013, 15:01:59 UTC
Yay, MY story is continuing! ^_^ Hehe.

Ryo just can't resist Dee! But then again, who could? (“Please, please, please put the gi on for me, sweetheart? Just this once?” - Awww! Too adorable! I can see his pleading puppy-dog eyes so clearly!)

This chapter was just as lovely as the first one. I practically grinned and gigglesnorted my way through it. At least as long as I wasn't busy drooling!

Keep up the good work! :) The hotness is increasing...

(PS: The Dee in my user pic is definitely the Neanderthal-rapist-type, not the masterful seducer! xD )

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brit_columbia September 22 2013, 18:57:08 UTC
I love that icon of yours. Dee is out of control!

I think it was quite mean of Dee to offer Ryo a bj and then quit partway through because he wanted Ryo to wear his gi and play a game. Ryo will get his revenge. And then Dee will try to regain the upper hand There's going to be a back-and-forth power struggle between them for the next hour or two. The karate dojo might lose some of its purity!

Thanks for commenting! I can imagine you gigglesnorting.

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anonymous September 22 2013, 17:15:07 UTC
My mental image of Dee in this chapter is quite ridiculous... I just can't imagine him doing the "Osu!" thing.

Waiting for the next chapter! I hope Ryo gets tied up, or, or they'll reverse roles! *jumps up and down with excitement*

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brit_columbia September 22 2013, 18:58:55 UTC
Dee would do the "Osu!" thing and more, if only to more thoroughly enjoy his big pounce when it finally comes.

Thanks for being excited!

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jenmoon1 September 30 2013, 16:58:12 UTC
love the story looking foward to an update

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