You'd think I'd know better by now

[brihana25]

Story had an interesting premise. The summary sounded really, really good. The first chapter started out strong, and I was having positive thoughts

Comments

[darksilvercat]

That's gotta be a typo, right? Either that, or maybe he was speaking in morse code!

[brihana25]

I like the Morse code idea. And it's definitely something Doug would do.

"Hey, Hanson!"
"Yeah?"
"Dot dot dot dash dash dot dot dash..."
"Shut up, Doug."

:D

[or_mabinogi]

".." isn't all that forceful. He would have had better luck going with "..." I'm thinking "--" would have been overkill. Call for a restraining order if he uses that.

[brihana25]

Oh, you have a point about the strength of the --- vs. the ... I think we'd definitely be talking restraining orders, maybe even felonious assault charges.

[chattycatsmeow]

Maybe he threw two tennis balls at the guy - forcefully - and that's what the dots represent.

[moonshayde]

*scratches head*

That certainly is a new one for me.

(btw, not forgotten. betaed bit will be back either this weekend or not.)

[littleheaven70]

Oh,ugh, this contains many of my fanfic peeves. Firstly, a lot of the punctuation is incorrect. Secondly, this writer appears to be scared of just using "said." Honestly, readers barely notice "said" but it becomes distracting when the writer uses more and more creative alternatives to avoid using it - commented, whined, moaned, stated... *bangs head on desk* Thirdly, adverb abuse. If your sentence contains enough active content, you shouldn't need to use sadly or forcefully or happily or suspiciously at the end of it. The odd well-placed adverb is effective, but using them all the time is lazy writing. In this case, the fact that someone interrupted means the adverb isn't really necessary, because by nature an interruption is forceful.

*climbs off soapbox*

[jomadge]

I agree, she said. ;-)