Fic: The Perfect Life

[brightly_lit]

Title: The Perfect Life
Author: brightly_litRating: PG-13 for a tiny bit of language and disturbing situations/concepts

Comments

[gypsy_atavari]

Very insightful outside POV. Both of their illusions were sort of shattered, and its sad for both of them. Not feel good but still very awesome. :-)

[brightly_lit]

That's a good point, that it wasn't just Greg's illusions that were shattered. Yes, definitely not feel-good, but I tend to think nothing about Sam and Dean's lives was probably too feel-good when they were young ...

So glad you enjoyed.

[monteseverus]

You really have to wonder how many times something like this happened. Maybe more often for Sam as he always tried to live a normal life but still broke my poor heart with this story. Loved It!

[brightly_lit]

There you are! I hope RL is getting better for you lately ...?

I totally think it probably happened more often for Sam, too.

So glad you enjoyed. :-D

[kalliel]

“Nah; those are for self-protection,” Dean said, grabbing Greg by the shoulder and steering him into the kitchen. “Cheese stick?”

Best. Transition. Ever. I loved this; the tenseness of the Winchesters' lives is beautifully enhanced by Greg's POV, and I love the easy, increasingly arcane lies that come to the whole family as they dance around what's really going on. It's an exceedingly thin film, and in this fic they're particularly close to the edge. Really well done. I loved this!

[brightly_lit]

Best. Transition. Ever.

Thank you. ;-) I love that you pointed that out; I loved that moment, and the way Sam (always the better liar of the two, I realize more and more as I rewatch old episodes) ghosts into the room and provides a good lie when Dean can't think of anything. Exploring the ways they would lie and try to cover things up was one of the reasons I wanted to write this story.

I'm so glad you enjoyed it, and thanks for the thoughtful, observant comment!

[anniespinkhouse]

This was lovely. The outsider POV worked so well for their school life. They must have craved some friendship - but maing it work will have been impossible. I love the way that Sam stays on the periphery here, just in sight, creepy to Greg but protecting Dean already.

[brightly_lit]

Sam is my favorite, so I always have him somewhere in my stories, and I found that really fun, to imagine what Sam at 12 as "just the little brother" would look like to a stranger. I figured he might come across as a little creepy since he's way too serious and adult-acting for his age, not to mention surely already crafty and secretive. It's so sad to think they couldn't have friends. :-(

Glad you enjoyed it ...

[somer]

Very perfect outsider view. Loved this :D

[brightly_lit]

Oh, thank you so much!