Fishing for some feedback on some fiction. My main question is, would you want to read more? Also this piece may be too short to tell, but are the characters inconsistent?
a question, kitten, why are you spelling glamour 'glamer'?
apart from that I liked it, but it does feel kind of overly fan-fictiony, like it's from a lot of other fantasy sorts of stories. Badass magic people fighting the system seems to be a pretty common thread.
anyway, what are you up to lately? i don't work wednesdays and thursdays, and i feel like doing some travelling, you should give me a call sometime.
It's a spelling used for the product of some illusory magics. An illusionist creates glamers.
This is a good point about the faniness, thank you for pointing that out.
I may be moving back to Plymouth, which would make for a less fun visit. I'll give you a call in a couple days and if I'm not moving back maybe we could do next week?
I found it a bit dull. I read through the first half and couldn't get to the second. The actual act of smoking is described too vividly and some of the wording is awkward.
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apart from that I liked it, but it does feel kind of overly fan-fictiony, like it's from a lot of other fantasy sorts of stories. Badass magic people fighting the system seems to be a pretty common thread.
anyway, what are you up to lately? i don't work wednesdays and thursdays, and i feel like doing some travelling, you should give me a call sometime.
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This is a good point about the faniness, thank you for pointing that out.
I may be moving back to Plymouth, which would make for a less fun visit. I'll give you a call in a couple days and if I'm not moving back maybe we could do next week?
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