Twilight Fic: For Good (A Change of Heart, Part 3)

[bratanimus]

Title: For Good (Part 3 of A Change of Heart)
Author: bratanimus
Rating: R
Spoilers: Set after Eclipse.
Warnings: Mid-transformation suffering
Pairings: Edward/Bella, all other canon pairings
Word Count: 6,552
Summary: I was witnessing now, before my undeserving eyes, the vast, incomprehensible scope of her love for me as she lay dying in my arms. She’d

Comments

[lillbet]

What really freaks me out about reading this is knowing for a certainty that when Meyer's 5th book (the one from Edward's POV- can't remember the title, sue me) comes out, it's going to suck compared to this. :P

(Keep in mind, I really did not like the first book, so the fact that I a.) wanted to see what was up and b.) read your fic through and enjoyed it was a bit jarring. More please.)

[bratanimus]

Midnight Sun. But you probably figured that out as soon as you hit "Post Comment," lol. ;)

Oh, thank you very much! I'm so pleased that this was believable to you, and even more thrilled that it was interesting enough to hold your attention. Thanks for reading. :)

Five Stars!

[medoraly]

!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

You > everyone else.

Rosalie and Bella. Possibly the best R/B scene I've read ever, and i makes sense that Rosalie would be the one there to see her through the change.

An extremely realistic change based on canon but you didn't harp on the pain or the blood, and thank you a million times for addressing Bella's scent for Edward and for Bella (something I'd never thought of before). You write Edward as a perfect balance of Twilight!Edward and Eclipse!Edward, he's so lovely in your hands.

Canon question: wasn't Esme changed before Rosalie?

Love this so much, I will be reading it again and rec'ing it to everyone. XD

Re: Five Stars!

[bratanimus]

Thanks, sweetie. :D That means a lot. I'm really happy that you liked Rosalie helping Bella through her change. I wanted to subtly hint at Rosalie's mothering instincts, so hopefully that came through a little. In a strange way, I wonder if this - seeing how Bella is willing to suffer to be with Edward - is the thing that helps Rosalie push past her animosity towards Bella.

I'm glad you liked Bella's realization of her own scent. I don't think she ever quite gets it in canon, so I'd think after she becomes like him it would hit her like a ton of bricks. She'd finally know the INTENSE self-restraint he's had to put forth all this time.

Canon question: wasn't Esme changed before Rosalie?

D'oh! Brain fart. ;) *blushes furiously* I have corrected that. THANK YOU. :)

Thanks again for your very kind words!

Re: Five Stars!

[medoraly]

You are so very welcome! I love your stories, you are a master at drawing a reader in.

I wonder if this - seeing how Bella is willing to suffer to be with Edward - is the thing that helps Rosalie push past her animosity towards Bella.

That's definitely the subtext I read of it. I think Rosalie and Bella's relationship is fascinating, they're are so different yet the same. And your thoughts of Em/R and E/B sold it all for me, how love is very different yet still love.

The scent issue is one of my favorites, because I don't think Bella gets it, or can get it, because she's never experienced anything like it. And, of course, my own worries always surface that Edward won't "want" her as much when she is not human, so I LOVED the touch about him finally coming to terms with her change, and that he still wants her and can finally act on it without half of his brain dedicated to not killing her.

Re: Five Stars!

[bratanimus]

Thank you again! *blushes intensely* You are too kind. :D

And your thoughts of Em/R and E/B sold it all for me, how love is very different yet still love.

I'm glad that came through for you. I'm in no way putting down Em/R, but I do think their dynamic is quite different. E/B have a very intense, single-minded, almost violent attraction to one another; whereas Em/R's seems more familiar and comfortable, more comforting, if that makes sense.

And, of course, my own worries always surface that Edward won't "want" her as much when she is not human, so I LOVED the touch about him finally coming to terms with her change, and that he still wants her and can finally act on it without half of his brain dedicated to not killing her.I worry, too, about Edward's feelings of loss when Bella no longer smells so delicious. So I'm VERY pleased that my justification for the absence of this sense of loss made sense to you. I think Edward NEEDED to witness her 3 days of hell, not only to serve out his "punishment," but also to come to terms

[runawaycherie]

O_O

You inspire me! Oh this was just simply brilliant. I love the last two parts and this was amazing.

I want more lol! Your writing is really amazing.

Excellent job!

[bratanimus]

Thank you so much! It's gratifying to know that the last two parts were worthwhile, and that you liked this, too. Thanks for taking the time to comment on this. I appreciate it. :D

You did it...

[frieda79]

i already wanted to start begging for the next chapter... ;o)

Great chapter.. interesting idea,the way bella responds to her own (former) scent.. i have never read about sth. like that in another fanfiction..

great, loved it... i'm really looking forward to the next chapter..

Re: You did it...

[bratanimus]

Oh, thank you!! I'm glad you liked the idea of Bella responding to her former scent. It makes sense to me that it would hit her like a hurricane, once she becomes a vampire, and suddenly she'd understand what Edward had had to go through to be near her.

Thanks again. I'm happy you liked this. :D

[bratanimus]

Oh, I want someone to rip Jane's head off, too. Haven't quite decided yet if I'm actually going to make that happen, lol. Thanks for reading! I'm happy you liked this. :D

[bratanimus]

Oh, NICE. That sounds awesome. :D