Comments | bratanimus: Twilight Fic: Consummation (A Change of Heart, Part 2)

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Twilight Fic: Consummation (A Change of Heart, Part 2)

Apr 17, 2008 19:16

Title: Consummation (Part 2 of A Change of Heart)
Author: bratanimus
Rating: R
Spoilers: Set after Eclipse.
Warnings: Sexual content, blood.
Pairings: Edward/Bella, all other canon pairings
Word Count: 6,112
Summary: Our wedding night wasn’t supposed to be like this. They’d decided that Bella was too great a risk, and they were prepared to kill all of us ( Read more... )

edward/bella, twilight, change of heart, fic

Comments 195

duck_or_rabbit April 18 2008, 01:13:57 UTC

Alice was silent.

I'll be back....

*goes to count to seven*

bratanimus April 18 2008, 02:14:41 UTC

*blush* A speechless Alice? Thank you! :D

duck_or_rabbit April 18 2008, 05:11:47 UTC

First of all, let me say WOW.

Now having read all three of your Twilight fics, it's clear you have mastered Edward's emotional intimacy and virtue of depth, generating a rounded character unlike any other I have recently read in ff. I am wholly trustworthy that this is the remarkable Edward that Bella herself has earnestly explored and discovered. Staggering. Edward must be continuously riding your thoughts to achieve the deep-seated ties to his voice that you have, and I offer you no sympathies for having him so often in your company ( ... )

bratanimus April 18 2008, 11:52:03 UTC

OK, are you Bella and am I Edward? Because you totally see things in me that I didn't see in myself ( ... )

amyxaphania April 18 2008, 01:39:39 UTC

Oh wow, that was amazing. Loved it!

bratanimus April 18 2008, 02:20:58 UTC

Thank you very much! I'm glad you liked it. :)

meggers102290 April 18 2008, 01:54:30 UTC

OH wow.
that was fantastic
do write more, please.

it makes life so much better as we all wait for august second.

bravo.

bratanimus April 18 2008, 02:21:56 UTC

Thank you! I do intend to write more; that's what will keep me sane until August, lol. I'm so pleased that you enjoyed this! :D

team_switz April 18 2008, 01:55:45 UTC

Oh. My. Edward.
This is beautiful, you know that? The desperation, the passion, the sadness...Dear God, I'm still shaking.

"She was my heart now.

As penance for my selfishness, over the next three days, I would watch it die."

This is love.

Keep going, and yes, write the rest! As much as I love this ending, I'm anxious to see your take on the rest.

bratanimus April 18 2008, 02:23:53 UTC

Thank you! I'm happy you thought the emotional tone of the piece worked. And I do plan to write more, as I do need to do SOMETHING to kill the time until August. ;)

Thanks so much for reading! :)

crailis April 18 2008, 01:56:05 UTC

Wow. Just... wow.

That was absolutely fantastic. I couldn't breathe through half of it, and thats always a good sign. Wow...

<3

bratanimus April 18 2008, 02:24:48 UTC

Hee hee, thanks! I will take breathless as a very nice compliment. :D

Thank you for your kind words. :)