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New Story: For a Song, Part 2

Dec 01, 2007 14:49

Title: For a Song
Author: bratanimus
Summary: With no more fanfare than that, I’m away from home, from them. And when I’m out of hearing range I stop singing and my grin falls and, clearing my raw throat, I lunge into the future, though I don’t know where that is yet. Sirius/Lily.
Rating: R
Warnings: Language, sex.
Word Count: 12,107
Author’s Note: Written ( Read more... )

oc, sirius, red and the wolf, gen, lily, romance, fic

Comments 35

riveroad December 1 2007, 21:59:38 UTC

You'll have to excuse me if this review sounds like one indiscernible whimper. Sirius has been my favourite cannon character since I first learned he had a flying bike. This just made me love him more.

I expected a very different story when I read the opening lines but it's even more emotional than I imagined.

He's so tortured and tender at the same time and what really came through to me is how much he longs to belong to someone.

Just gorgeous.

bratanimus December 1 2007, 22:58:10 UTC

Oh, thank you! That this story made you love Sirius even more is the highest praise you could give me. Thank you. :)

I'm glad the opening lines didn't give away what happens later. I wanted Sirius to really be in denial of what's just happened, what he's just lost; and so acting the fool is the only way he knows to distance himself emotionally from what he's just been through. That and the firewhiskey. ;)

I'm so glad that you found him tortured and tender at the same time; I've been longing to explore those aspects of Sirius for a while, so it's good to know that it worked. And yes, he does long to belong to someone, and he longs to be loved, because he certainly never got it from his family. I figure this day (the way I envisioned it) could have been a pivotal day for him, so I deliberately wanted to keep the ending ambiguous, to at least give him a chance at some happiness and belonging, with someone other than the Potters.

Thank you again for your kind words. :)

devilish__angel December 2 2007, 01:00:35 UTC

Oh oh oh.

I know I should be writing and not reading, but I saw that you post and... yeah. Oh so very heartbreakingly wonderful. *purrs happily*

bratanimus December 2 2007, 01:09:39 UTC

Thank you! Purrs are good, and I'm glad it broke your heart just a little bit. ;) Thanks for reading! :D

an_fhanai December 2 2007, 01:50:39 UTC

Your Sirius icon is impossibly and unfairly pretty. *covets wildly*

I've had three different reactions to your story now, with three corresponding reviews, all conflicting, since how does one squee and wibble and melt into a puddle all at the same time? So many good things in this fic (the lethifold bit was inspired, well done) and your characterizations of Lily and Sirius were fabulous. And I'm doing my best to focus on the happiness here instead of possible reasons for why it would have ended; Sirius seems so hopeful, it's painful to think of what seeing Lily with James would do to him. *sigh*

I think I need to go and read it again. :D

bratanimus December 2 2007, 02:12:04 UTC

Thank you! I'm beyond tickled that this fic elicited squees, wibbles, AND melts all in one go! I'm so pleased that you liked the lethifold idea (I figure the Blacks are not only evil but very creative). And I'm very happy that you liked my take on Sirius and Lily.

Like I said in another reply above, I intentionally left the ending ambiguous, so you can take with you what you like. The potential for angst is there for sure, but I also left the story with a Sirius who means to keep whatever promises he whispered to Lily at her door. ;)

Glad you like my Sirius icon. You mean this one? Believe it or not, it's singer Rufus Wainwright. I figured he wouldn't mind being characterized as the Marauder who gets the most action, particularly in slash. ;)

Thanks again for your very lovely review. :D

an_fhanai December 2 2007, 02:27:12 UTC

Is it Rufus Wainwright? I didn't recognize him, but yay! I think he makes an awesome Sirius.

"...take with you what you like."

Um, I'm going to make a happy little AU place in my head for this fic, complete with farm and blueberries. After DH, I'm getting amazingly good at ignoring canon. :P

hrymfaxe December 2 2007, 11:02:28 UTC

What a beautiful story. Your Sirius is a wonderful mix of many conflicting emotions, and he is having a lot of trouble sorting them out himself. I adore his love-affair with his black beauty - it is such a man-thing, and the bike is an interesting creature, very like a cat ( ... )

bratanimus December 2 2007, 13:41:10 UTC

Thank you, Marie! Now it's MY turn to squee with pleasure -- what a wonderful and thoughtful review. :D ( ... )

hrymfaxe December 2 2007, 14:55:24 UTC

I forgot to say that I also liked your little play with fairytale-metaphors. Especially when he accidentally thinks she can make him into a real boy! Not only is it funny, because he meant to think man, but also a great freudian slip because by her love he hapes she might actually turn him into a real boy and not the hurting soul he is. Oh Sirius...

I think you are right in that his dysfunctional family and the lack of love from home has let him to often be portrayed as a womanizer in fanfic. He is very hungry for it...

bratanimus December 2 2007, 15:42:40 UTC

Thank you! That little slip was actually a reference to Pinocchio, who as you know is a puppet made of wood who longs to be a real boy, so Sirius was indeed mixing metaphors there by jumping from Peter Pan to Pinocchio; but your take on it was absolutely right, too. He thinks Lily, who represents all sorts of love to him - friend, maternal, romantic, sexual - might have the magic to repair him. I happen to think that it might have happened if he'd ended up with her and let it happen.

Thank you again for your very insightful comments! They mean the world to me. :)

mrstater December 2 2007, 15:18:26 UTC

You know I don't stray beyond R/T much, but you intrigued me when you described this, so I had to read, and I have to say, there wasn't once my attention wavered while I was reading this. I was totally hooked from beginning to end and totally feeling for Sirius with everything he went through ( ... )

bratanimus December 2 2007, 15:54:45 UTC

Thank you! I'm really pleased that you wanted to read this, and even MORE tickled that this story is helping Sirius to grow on you. :)

I'm glad the beginning worked for you, because yes, I wanted him to be all bravado there and not to face what's happened until later. I enjoyed writing from his POV, because I got to explore what he was really feeling inside (e.g., the moment when he feels to make sure he's got his wand, because he can't go back inside the house again ( ... )