Arena: Chapter 17: Dreaming

[brainofck]

Title/Chapter: Dreaming
Author: muck-a-luck, posting in brainofck
Pairing: SB/VM (other pairings in later chapters)
Rating: NC-17
Summary: Viggo is somewhere else, where everyone and no one is the same
Content/warnings: AU. Violence.
Spoilers: None.
Disclaimer: Slash is fiction. So while we may all be demented, slash is basically the author's own porno script,

Comments

[thalassatx]

This chapter was exquisite.

[brainofck]

Wow. Thank you!

[ullman]

*sighs* Brilliant chapter....shame it had to end though.

Not to worry

[brainofck]

So glad you liked it. There's more to come, though alas we will be turning away from smut for a while, back to plot... :)

[wyldestarr]

*whimper* I have told you you're Evil, right? Hot and tender and sweet and melancholy all rolled into one. *bawls*

*cackles evilly*

[brainofck]

Ha, ha! Then my work here is done! *snickers*

Really, though. Not too maudlin? What about predictable? This chapter is really bugging me, but I decided it wasn't worth belaboring...

Re: *cackles evilly*

[wyldestarr]

Ha, ha! Then my work here is done! *snickers*
Pfft. Wench. :p

No, I don't think it was too maudlin, especially given the subject matter. It was melancholy, but didn't over-angst me (which is good). As for predictable, I don't think so. Viggo was Viggo as you have him written and though I was mildly surprised at the ease with which Sean allowed Viggo to top, I can totally see him wanting to try to replace 2yrs of hell with a much better memory.

I guess...if anything were to be considered predictable, I would go with the 'Sean loving/wanting Viggo from almost the first day' or 'Viggo getting testy and saying Sean wouldn't be there long enough for Laurel's offer to matter'. Of those, I think the first would be the most likely to be a predictable plot point. The more I think about the second option, the less I think of it as predictable and more simply inline with character development and what the character would do. And even if one or both points ARE predictable...it's how you deal with them from here on that will determine

Re: *cackles evilly*

[brainofck]

Much more worried about maudlin than predictable, so good that it didn't over-angst you. I really am a multiple drafts think it over for a long time kind of girl. I need time to let the ideas percolate and feel confident I've said what I tried to say. But I don't think I can sit on these things for two months at a time anymore...

Interesting, your thoughts about Viggo topping. That was probably a miss on my part. Jeez. I cannot say this in any way that doesn't sound ridiculously romantic or incredibly crude. Sean wanted Viggo to make love to him and was worried that Viggo wouldn't, under the circumstances. Not so much to blot out his current experience as that was what he wanted *from Viggo*. Will consider possible rewrites and additions.

Thanks!

[bee_ta_baby]

wow . . . just wow

[brainofck]

:) Thanks!

[brainofck]

*blushes* Thank you so much. :)