Makoto Kokubo; E4-D3. Pretend

[makoto_kokubo]

It wasn’t the same.

Makoto stood in his room, back against the door, hand tugging at the handle, as if the sight frightened him.

It kind of did, but he didn't know why. It was just his room. Small and cramped.

Clothes were strewn everywhere. Hangers, broken, littered the floor. Boxes, full of crap from when he was just a kid, had been tossed aside

Comments

[themongers]

Wow, Shaun. Based on what you've written so far, Makoto is a very strong contender this version. Great start. Keep it up!

[schalein]

Fuuuurguurrr, this was amazing! I thought the last sentence in particular was really cute. :3

[koyasaurus]

He didn't bother fixing it. Maybe he'd do it if he was still alive in three days.

rofl, i loved this. Anyway, I don't need to tell you what I think, you know I love Makotes ♥ Keep it up!

[rietje_1]

That was great, Makoto's personality comes across so well in the narrative. The tie-in with his father and tetris (lool) worked, I think, it showed not only Makoto's but a glimpse of his parents' personalities, too. Looking forward to see what will happen to him, Chie, and Satoshi.

[cheesydorito]

Shaun, I really liked this post. :3 I love the way Makoto and Chie interact. I think the part I liked the most was the flashback, though. It was so subtle and yet really effective and shows that a lot of times the things that affect us the most don't seem like a big deal at the time.