Scent and Light

Jun 27, 2007 12:20

Title: Scent and Light
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challenge 07: in the dark

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buffyangellvr23 June 27 2007, 19:37:39 UTC
Nicely done :)

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callieach June 27 2007, 19:39:11 UTC
Thanks!

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willowwood June 28 2007, 18:04:12 UTC
Beautiful, that's all I have to say.........Ok i lied rotflmao. Again the use of imagery was perfect, and i love the similarities and contrasts between the past and the present. You more than anybody should know that i've always been in the frame of mind that Jack didn't really get on with his parents, so considering it from a different perspective with him having a mother who wants him to cling onto his youth for as long as possible ("She’s laughing when she takes his book on natural disasters away from him, telling him that little boys shouldn’t concern themselves with the science of the world, not just yet"), and how clear it is how much he loves and admires her, and that it is just the father who's the absent figure ("His temperature is running hot and his father is out. That’s the only time his mother will let him sleep in their bed, surrounded by the strong, rosy smell of her perfume and that lamp that she fought so hard to keep beside her") makes a refreshing change from all the angst and heartbreak that i usually imagine/write

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callieach June 28 2007, 18:49:56 UTC
You never just end with 'beautiful', do you? lmao. Nah, I like it that way.

I've just always got the feeling that he'd rebel against his father, but be afriad of hurting his mother. And, I'm kind of stereotypical in the way that I automatically assume someone in a position of power such as head of the Cantilever group would not know how to get along with a young son.

Thanks for the feedback, P, you sound as if you thought it over hard. ;)

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