so i wrote a song............

[bolt11290]

ya i wrote a song. see im tryin to get into songwritin so i started out by writing this song. its call Let Your Glory Shine Around. its about how we become distracted from our walk with God. when really all we need to do is step back and listen to what God has to say, or in other words i like to think of it letting his shine around. so heres the

Comments

[mr_erg]

Nice job. I look forward to hearing it. Here's my two cents: I would change line two of 2nd verse. Replace "he" with "you".

[kirby0981]

I like.

My Opinion:
Change "he" to "you"
Change the 3rd line of the second verse to something else.

Advice on Song Writing that I have stumbled upon:
"The best songs are written, and then rewritten."

[mstonya]

Congratulations! Can't wait to hear it. Afterall, reading a song is one thing, but hearing it is an altogether different thing. Wouldn't you agree? ;)