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choko_jun in bokura_no_uta

[ONESHOT] On-Day.

Nov 10, 2010 22:23

Title: On-Day
Group: U-Kiss
Pairing: Elixander (Eli/Alexander). Do I even write anything else? Kind of Eli/U-Kiss, but not really.
Rating: R.
Warning: PaWP, lameness, lack of sexiness, bad English, handjob.
Summary: Eli just woke up in one of these days.
N/A: First time I write R+ not because brandnewwind requested it, but because it actually appeared in my head. ( Read more... )

oneshot, rating: r, p: alexander lee/elison kim, group: u-kiss, ...just stupid

Comments 24

samanitajayne November 11 2010, 02:22:09 UTC

I am totally floored! Why do you both keep reading my mind?? I was just hoping I would spot and update from either of you today (cos I miss y'all like that)
and BOOM! I see TWO UPDATES!!!! :D

Thank you for putting a smile on my face today! *dances around merrily*

choko_jun November 11 2010, 17:15:20 UTC

Me and Loli are espers. We've recently discovered this fact because we kept reading each other's minds. Absolutely creepy... BUT YOU'RE SO SWEET OMG THANK YOU *-* it touches me, to imagine someone waiting for my updates. /hides face and giggles

Thank you for reading and commenting! ♥♥

brandnewwind November 11 2010, 02:34:09 UTC

I'm such a sucker for Elixander that, in face of hot, gorgeous, beautiful handjob sex (WHICH I'M VERY FOND OF, FOR SOME REASON), I fail more over the post-coital cuddling, which was just so adorable.

I love it because it's so well described ♥ From the time in which Eli got worked up over the fanboy text on, it got so real and palpable, so intense at times and light-hearted at others, I love this feeling so much ♥

Oh, Alexander was such a pleasant surprise lol Eli was all "omg, I'm jerking off to the thought of, like, a child at mind! nonono!" and then Xander comes totally "why stop the hotness, honey?" and it all like lkjdklasjdlakdjlaksdjlkasdjlaksdjlakdj hothotsex♥ lksdjlskjsalkdjalskdjlkdjalksdj *-*

And did they call each other "baby"? I think they did~ it's so adorable >v< I also love the idea of Alexander marking Eli and Eli finding that arousing and wanting to check the bruise later. Complexes ♥

OUR THOUGHT TRANSMISSION WORRIES ME THOUGH ): WE'VE GOT TO STOP THINKING THE SAME STUFF )))):

“About the condom,” for the second ( ... )

choko_jun November 11 2010, 17:22:44 UTC

I know how you feel bb. I really do. ;^;
BASICALLY, YOU LIKE HOW MUCH I RAMBLED ABOUT IT EIRUHFOEIUHRFIOUEHFHEIRFOEIHROF well thanks! I never thought this would come to be a strong point of mine someday :'DDDDDDDDDDDDDDD

Alexander is climbin' in your chair and snatchin' your... Elis up. ELI GOES "IT'S A NO NO... AND I LIKE IT" REOIFHEOIURHFIUOWHERIUFHEIROHFOIWUEHR TUTTI-FRUTTI SUMMER LOVE IS TOO MADE OF WIN TO EXIST. Me likez your flailing ♥ :D

Erm they did hehe. I THOUGHT YOU DISLIKED THE "BABY"? HMMMMM, SOMEONE'S MIND HAS BEEN CHANGED BY CERTAIN PIS EVENTS. rofl mine too
Yes, this telepathy stuff is so not funny anymore. ó_ò

Yeah, you don't, just sometimes. I totally noticed your fluffy mood IOHEOIFUER but I guess the R was a good acessory anyway. Or not! Thank you for commenting :'D ♥♥♥♥

keke saikia2 November 11 2010, 03:02:31 UTC

kekeke i ABSOULTLY LOVE UR ELI/ALEXANDER SMUT FICS!! and other fics in general!!~ ^^........aish this was so HOT~~~!! COLD SHOWER!!! would be the best 4 me right now!!~ Great fic ^^ hope u make More Eli/Alexander smut fics ^^ AUTHOR HWAITING!!! (fist pump)

Re: keke choko_jun November 11 2010, 17:25:42 UTC

You do? *-* THANK YOU!! lksajsalkjsa thank you so much, really. You gave me the best compliment I ever received to an R fic: the 'cold shower' one :'DDDDDDDDD
Thank you! I will, I can never get tired of Elixander for some reason XD /bias. Thanks so much for reading and commenting! ♥♥♥

Re: keke saikia2 November 12 2010, 14:23:37 UTC

YES I RLLY DO!!! keke i could also never get tired of Elixander!~ their also my bias! I wonder who gave Alexander that kiss?? Hmmm hope its Eli oppa! ^^

s2_otter November 11 2010, 11:51:12 UTC

LOL THEY WEREN'T IN EACH OTHER AT ALL.
THIS IS A SMUT I'VE NEVER READ BEFORE LOL
YOU JUST INTRODUCED ME INTO A NEW WORLD 0.0!

Eli didn’t care if that was what people called ‘going gay for your bandmate’, because if that meant he could keep the make out session going, he was a very happy gay man.
I love the phrase "he was a very happy gay man.". XD It's like a pun or something and it sounds cute too XD

Lol, I loveeeeeeeee how his members make him hard for no reason.
And Dongho between Eli's legs was just LOL. Trip to the bathroom, face meets cold water, TELLS MORE THAN ANY OTHER DESCRIPTION CAN lol XD!
And Alexander looking like a pile of clothes. Blame Eli for not being a neat person :P But who cares about blaming when the two of them are in the same situation and ended up doing magical things with their hands ^^"

I think I'm talking way too dirty for someone my age :(
BUT CAN YOU BLAME ME? THIS FIC IS SO MUCH LOVE :D!

choko_jun November 11 2010, 17:32:30 UTC

REOIUFHEOIURHFUOIERHOIUF GREAT WORDING!! I did? WELL THANK YOU! WELCOME TO THE FANTASTIC WORLD OF THE HANDJOB \:'DDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDD/

A pun? XD 'Very happy gay man' sounds very rainbow-y and cute and huping-with-the-bunnys-like for me ROFL. The kind of thing I love, basically...

Dongho, hiding in the most inappropriate places EVER XD
Eli is so lame as a pervert, isn't he? He didn't even check before starting OIUHREFUOIEHRFER but yeah, everything ended up well :'D

How old are you? I'm a minor too (too?) anyway. SKALSASALJLSA THANK YOU! Thank you for reading and commenting bb ♥♥♥

s2_otter November 12 2010, 02:14:24 UTC

LOLLLL XDD
I'm welcomed /gets cookies for myself

Gay = Happy :P
You dooooooooooooo? /raises eyebrow and look back up at your fic.
I didn't know rainbows were rated R :P Just because they started with R XD

I know right, that boy, tsktsktsk. Just because he doesn't know how his body function yet, doesn't mean the rest don't LOLLL.
:DDD Yay for happy ending ^^

I'm a 15 year old minor XD
DON'T THANK ME HONEY, I FEEL BAD FOR NOT LEAVING A BETTER COMMENT T____T

elasticbanana November 11 2010, 22:09:07 UTC

"Because you keep getting horny all of sudden, with no obvious cause for it. "
I can imagine his face after he realizes he wants to fuck Alexander so much x'DD <3333

"Kevin, The Seatless"
Like the title of a movie x'DDDDD

"landed his gracious bottom on Eli’s lap"
GRACIOUS BOTTOM ASDLKHASFLBAEL FADSD xDDDDDDDDDDDDDD

"had noticed his little problem"
little problem?! HOW DO YOU KNOW IT'S *LITTLE*?!?! x'DDDD if you experienced something, lemme know 8DDDD

"Eli, please fuck me with that gun."
okay, this line made me laugh so hard x'DDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDD

"You know, I should probably advise you not to touch yourself before checking if the room is really empty"
ELI YOU'RE SUCH A LOSER X'DDDDDDDDDDDd <333

I can't believe that this was your first R+ fic DDD:
I HAVE ALREADY TOLD YOU THAT YOU'RE A GENIOUS, PARISIS <333
You definitely have to write moaaaarrrr smut >33333

Thanks for writing, dear~~~

choko_jun November 13 2010, 16:46:45 UTC

OERUHBFOUIEHRFIER YOU DO HAVE A NICE WAY TO SAY THINGS. I admire this OIUERHFIUOEHRFOIE

Kevin The Seatless sounds like an European King's name for me XD
YES GRACIOUS. EVERYTHING ABOUT KEVIN IS GRACIOUS.
And the problem is little, but not the thing with the problem HAHAHAAA GET IT? GET IT? /wiggles brows

THIS LINE EXISTS. I SWEAR. I SAW IT ON TUMBLR, AND IT WAS A LONG LONG CAPS-LOCKED MESSAGE ABOUT HOW THE GIRL WANTED ELI TO FUCK HER WITH THE GUN.
Completely creepy and amusing.
And Eli is the most careless pervert I've ever seen in my short life ROFL

Not my first R+, but yes the first minimally decent one OIUHEOUIRHFOUIERF
Thank you, eonni *____* I'll try to XD I guess.
Thank you for commenting, eonni! I love you~ ♥♥♥

elasticbanana November 13 2010, 16:57:45 UTC

THANKS ♥ Sometimes I think I'm too vulgar, because in Hungarian there are milder ways of saying fucking x'DDDD Not if I used those words LOL x'DD *bricked*

I'LL REWRITE THE HUNGARIAN HISTORY. Hungary will be invaded by the American Koreans. The king will be Eli the Hottest, the queen Alexander the tweeter I'd say something else, but that's not so public LOL xD and the lil' princess would be Kevin the Seatless x'DD

Well, Kevin is creamy-assed, too x'D Once I read a fic and i was like this O_O because the author described his ass as creamy x'DD That was at the beginning of the smeeex story, soo... it made me think so hard x'DDDDDDD and the solution was simple: his ass' COLOR! nothing else, lol x'DDDDDDDDDD *really very dirty-minded, she knows*

GOT IT X'DDDD /me wants to get the thing with the problem, too... WAAHHH, KILL ME, I'M TOTALLY HENTAI TODAY D:

Why with a gun? x'DDDDD Was it her fetish? Eeeeeeee!! My fetishes are Xander's eyes & ears x'DDD Okay, I'm not THAT perverted o.o SLBFALSHDFALSGB LONG FINGERS JKDFNLAKSDFLÉ SDFKJG ( ... )