More of the story. i still need to reread it and proofread -_-

[bobfirez]

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[grinny12121]

I like it so far. It gives enough information so that the reader can make reasonable guesses about what is to come, but not so much that it is obvious and no longer mysterious. I am not sure how much feedback you actually want, or what kind you do, but that is one of my first impressions after reading both chapters. I am interested in what is to come.