Hypen Abuse [EDITED: 8.25.07]

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About a month later...

Oh my, I actually know where this story is going. (A plot? No way!)

Then again, I don't really consider character-development stories to have real plots.

Senbonzakura is really difficult to write in character. It's just so much easier to write a Whiny, Superiority-Complex-ed, Mary Sue.

Anywho:

Title: Royal Affairs

Comments

[cupsmou]

Sebonzakuraaaa! Can't wait for them to get it on the reactions of everyone else, or something. Ish. You know what I mean...?

A plot, a plot! It's what everyone loves. I myself think they are lovely little things, along with controlling biznatches who you do write pretty well, despite your apparant problems with it. That was a run on sentence. D:

Love The ex-OC you had there, btw. Just annoying enough that you don't feel sorry for him when Byakuya doesn't lift a finger. xD

[cupsmou]

Also, for the banner- you might want to try flexible squares, because I think there is an option for that. I get most of my premade layouts (b/c I am super-lazy) from refuted.

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v__v I have been so bad about replying (or being productive in general). But don't blame me, I have discovered GBA emulators and free pokemon game downloads! (30 hours of Emerald = how much of a life I have) =]

XD I have no OC naming abilities. My sister was watching Mulan behind me when I was searching for a last name XP

I checked out refuted a while ago, and they are pretty shnazzy. But I have separation anxiety when I don't have my sidebars - it comes from being on Xanga for so long. T_T

[shayheyred]

This is just wonderful, a terrific continuation. I love the concept and the way you've portrayed Byakuya here - uncertain, stiff, still learning, unwilling to bend...and this line:

icy and raw and oh so deliciously violating

is gorgeous.
Really, really well done.

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Thank you for the compliment =]

It was one of those moments when the line just pops into your brain and you have to fit it into the story SOMEHOW even if you have retwist your entire plot. (And alas, a plot was born!)

[grass_angel]

Oooh, the line about mind boy and spirit. Chilling
But so good. I liked that last bit.
Not so much the Byakuya being pounded, or his little smarmy 'I can do it by myself' arse, even though I know that phase will go soon enough, but the ending is what I enjoyed the most.

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I guess that's what we love most about Byakuya - his stick up the arse attitude. =]

[zelha]

This is the kind of story you can actually call fanon. Your Senbonzakura is so... sharp, sarcastic, savage... is like a real blade should be, if its has some personality.

I'm really looking forward to the next installment! <3

Congratulation for your plot, is REALLY interesting! :3

[tofucakes]

Still love the characterization, still love the plot. Everything I wanted to say has already been said!

Can't wait for the next part :]