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blythe025

The Many Adventures of Fay Fairburn - An Assortment of Cages

Jan 30, 2012 14:05

[This story is a continuation of Part I, Part II, Part III, Part IV, and Part V. Though not necessary, you may want to read those first.Fay got a hearty slap across the face for being late with the food. It knocked her backward against the table, but Vervain, distracted by her own hunger, didn’t stay to administer any greater punishment. She just ( Read more... )

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karmasoup January 31 2012, 19:54:40 UTC

The girl is brave, that's for sure, but not always all that bright. Still, it would be hard to pass up the opportunity... maybe she'll get lucky, or help. Nice continuation.

blythe025 January 31 2012, 20:04:45 UTC

Heh. Yeah, she does have a tendency to naively leap forward in most of what she does. :)

sweeny_todd January 31 2012, 21:33:52 UTC

I think this is my favourite chapter so far! that spider is just so cute! (I have a soft spot though ^_^)

blythe025 February 1 2012, 17:35:46 UTC

Hehe. Thanks! I'm not fond of spiders in real life, but I could be friends with this one.

muchtooarrogant February 1 2012, 00:39:51 UTC

This was a wonderful story, as always, but I particularly liked this part.

"Bupkis sat up, the horns on his head sprouting into green leaves. One horn even had a small blooming flower on it."

Well done!

Dan

blythe025 February 1 2012, 17:35:59 UTC

Thanks, Dan. :)

basric February 1 2012, 01:08:27 UTC

I love these stories, she is very courageous. Well done. (=

blythe025 February 1 2012, 17:40:24 UTC

Thank you. :)

whipchick February 1 2012, 02:41:10 UTC

This is awesome - raise the stakes, eh? I love that this is another traditional moment - the good deed that creates havoc and risk, that you've written your own take on.

Questions for later - how does Fay know what to look for in the potions? Why doesn't the tether to the tree kick in? What is Granny weaving and why (I can see it, but I don't know what it is)

Love the detail of Granny remembering the babies swaddled to her back - makes her so human and real.

I can't wait to find out what happens with the boy who has her name - great set-up of something to come!

PS - love concrit over at my place if you have time.

blythe025 February 1 2012, 17:44:13 UTC

Indeed! I needed the stakes raised to keep my interest as well as the readers. Keeping all the threads straight is going to be especially interesting from here on out, I'm sure.