CSI:NY: 3am, Wide Awake

[bluflamingo]

Title: 3am, Wide Awake
Author: Emily1982
Fandom: CSI: New York
Pairing: Danny/Mac
Rating: PG
Words: 2796
Feedback: Yes please. Even if it’s bad. Especially if it’s bad.
Disclaimer: No, I don't own them, for which I should think they're profoundly grateful.

AN1: Written for delgaserasca’s Multifandom Ficathon Fest . Prompt: “I always wanted to be somebody but now I

Comments

[pinkamethyst]

Very nice. I think you had Danny perfectly in-character throughout -- snapping at people, being crap with funerals, running to escape. And the way it was written, with the thoughts flowing freely and jumping all over the place -- I think that's Danny too. And the line about Aiden being a cop first and everything else second, that was nice. Because, yes, she had a life outside the lab and she probably had boyfriends and such, but if it came to it, she'd always give that up to do her job because it means so much to her.

One thing for everything that’s happened, they’re more like a team again, like they were before Aiden was fired, before he was accused of shooting a police officer, before Hawkes joined the ME’s office, before Claire died, before, before, before, until Danny realises he can’t *remember* before.That was my favourite line. I can't explain why, but it was just perfect. The repetition of 'before', him being unable to remember. Maybe there was a before, when Mac smiled and there wasn't the awkwardness between him and Danny

[bluflamingo]

Wow, thanks for such a detailed comment! Especially for saying Danny sounded in character - I find him so difficult to write without making him sound too much like a weepy teenage girl.

But I guess it's been a long time since that, and Danny's so
caught up in the crap that he can't remember being happy.

Yeah, exactly - he's not a happy boy, especially by the end of the series, and I'm not sure working in the lab would ever have been a relaxed kind of thing - that's ort of wishful thinking on his part, maybe.

[bluflamingo]

If all the short reviews were like your's, I'd be happy to give up long reviews! I'm glad you liked it, anyway.

[bluflamingo]

Thanks!

"Lovely how he suddenly gets all excited when Mac shows up :-)"

I could see that really clearly in my head. I was thinking of him and Mac betting on Lindsey eating the grub's, and how relaxed and happy they look together. To me, Danny's problems all seem to stem from how invested he is in what Mac thinks of him, so, excitment when he turns up at the door.

[fading_hawkeye]

*sighs* It was so nice to read a MAcDanny story from a Danny POV for once. It felt so refreshing for some odd reason. Not that I don't like Mac. I adore him, love him, worship him even. It's just this was really really nice and wonderfully sad in all the right places!! You did such a great job!! I adooooooored the ending! ^_^

[bluflamingo]

Thanks - I'm glad it all worked for you, especially the ending. I hate writing last lines!

You know, I've never really thought about the number of Danny pov v Mac pov stories out there - tho I will be now! I just can't get into Mac's head - Danny's difficult enough as it is!

[fading_hawkeye]

I don't like writing last lines much easier, but you seemed to do just fine!! ^_^

Oh I'm the opposite. Mac comes a lot easier for me, and Danny is the difficult one. I think it's because Mac is my favorite, so I spend more time contemplating his behavior and such. I dunno. But maybe that's why I was so glad to read your fic because I write so much Mac POV!! Great job again though!!!!! ^_^

[anonymous]

Oh, I like this. Very nicely done. :)

[bluflamingo]

Thanks!