July Entry #3

[bluemoon02]

Didn't do so great last week, so hopefully this one will come off a bit better. The prompt was happiness, so I knew exactly what to enter!

Comments

[musicrocks987]

I really liked this!
Good Job!

Best of Luck!

OoO~Stuck in the Stars~OoO

[ursulawade]

"Not in immediate wrenching sobs, like he had seen others cry for lesser reasons, but in his own mind that only made the grief more sincere." My favorite line, bar none. It is so incredibly true. You've done an excellent job of taking the prompt and putting it an an unusual context and, what's more, it works out great! Good luck this week!

[the_panic_light]

Hello! Oh my God, that was great! A very touching little snapshot. I wish I knew better the feeling Simon talks about at the end, when he folds it away into his heart. Oh, lovely.

Now, while I am by no means your editor, I just wanted to say that up there you've got: "and yay, though I walk through the valley..." - that should be "yea". :)

Excellent work, though! And good luck!

[bluemoon02]

You mean it isn't "yay" as in "yaaaaaaaaaaaaayyyy!!!!!!" Cos that's what it says in my Bible :P

Thanks for that.

[lacruciverbiste]

you rock, as usual. i'm keeping these short 'n' sweet, as i shall be editing for REAL come tomorrow! hopefully i get yours :)

keep it up! good luck in the polls!

[bluemoon02]

I am friending you now. Hope that's OK :)

[intermezzo_poet]

I like that you chose to put a flicker of hope and happiness amidst what is a typically dreary scenario. Nice work..