"Rites of Passage"

May 25, 2008 21:44

Title: “Rites of Passage ( Read more... )

gen, standalone, flashback/pre-series, john, sam, john pov, short, dean

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jorma_duran May 26 2008, 14:14:44 UTC
Oh wow, this is great! You have such a great way of conveying the emotions in this so clearly and naturally, without actually spelling it out. I really love your style!

I find all of the boys are spot on. John resigned to the fact that his boys have to deal with this, while wishing that was not the case and being at a relative loss as to how to deal (or help them deal) with it.

Sam, so full of righteous indignation at first, then followed by his own blend of humility when he realizes his oversight. All the while suffering his own trauma. I also see Sam really longing to work through this with Dean and grieving all the more because he can't.

And Dean quietly hurting in the background and dealing with it all the way Dean always deals.

Super fic. Thanks for sharing.

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blueiris08 May 28 2008, 02:01:53 UTC
I'm glad you enjoyed it, and thanks for commenting on all three boys. I tend to find Sam fairly easy to write, but John's more of an unknown quantity, and it was a little tricky to keep Dean in the background without marginalizing him. It's good to hear that all the characters came through.

Thanks again!

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iamstealthyone May 26 2008, 14:28:08 UTC
Good look at how all three Winchesters have seen things they'd rather not, and the ways in which they cope. I especially like these last two lines:

He put the bottle back down.

He didn’t need to see more ghosts tonight.

Nice, quiet aching here.

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blueiris08 May 28 2008, 02:02:24 UTC
I'm happy you enjoyed it. Thanks for commenting!

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roguebitch May 26 2008, 15:08:48 UTC

I'm trying to picture Dean with a ponytail and...failing. *grins*

I liked this story, a very nice, very sympathetic character study of all of them. I don't care for John that much either, and it's nice to read stories where he actually shows a different side than what I'm accustomed to in canon.

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blueiris08 May 28 2008, 02:30:54 UTC
I'm trying to picture Dean with a ponytail and...failing. *grins*

I know, I know. But hey, it's different!

I liked this story, a very nice, very sympathetic character study of all of them. I don't care for John that much either, and it's nice to read stories where he actually shows a different side than what I'm accustomed to in canon.

Thank you! The on-screen portrayal of John's character has always seemed a little contradictory. On the one hand, the flashbacks to the boys' childhood showed him as a hard and (IMHO) neglectful father. On the other hand, he was physically affectionate with the adult Sam and Dean, and they didn't think they needed to hide emotions like fear or self-doubt to him. So it seemed that he had to have done more positive parenting than we actually saw.

I appreciate you letting me know that the story worked for you.

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zillah975 May 26 2008, 20:27:47 UTC
I like this a lot! Maybe you like John better than you know -- or at least understand him. I think this is spot-on.

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blueiris08 May 28 2008, 19:31:13 UTC
Thank you! I guess the best way of putting it is that I don't like what we've actually seen of John as a father (okay, or as a person), but the warmer interactions he sometimes had with the boys suggests that there was more to him than we saw on-screen. This story was trying to bridge the gap between the disapproving authoritarian of "Something Wicked" and the man who gives teary-eyed bear hugs in "Shadow." I'm glad that it seemed plausible to you.

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tabaqui May 27 2008, 01:34:33 UTC
Ah, i love it. For once, Sam's totally wrong - John *does* know, and he'll know until his grave.
Loved it.
:)

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blueiris08 May 28 2008, 19:32:18 UTC
For once, Sam's totally wrong

Well, just this once. ;-)

I'm happy you liked it--thanks for commenting!

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