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Requiem (R)

Apr 19, 2010 21:45

Title: Requiem (R)
Author: blackmamba_esq
Fandom: Flash Forward
Characters: Demetri, Zoey, mentions Mark, Simon, Al
Pairing: Demetri/Zoey
Word Count: 1,170
Written for dark_fest Prompt: Any Fandom, Any pairing, "I could touch you and you wouldn't even feel me. You don't even know the danger you're facing. If I'm quiet, I'll slide up behind you and if you hear me I'll ( Read more... )

television: flash forward, blackmamba_esq, pairing: demetri/zoey, character: zoey andata, character: demetri noh

Comments 17

djkiwi2576 April 20 2010, 03:06:52 UTC

Wow. Mamba you've done some wonderful work with the fics you're posting. This was beautiful, sad, and haunting. Wonderful.

blackmamba_esq April 20 2010, 04:16:37 UTC

Thank you so much! It felt weird writing this show after so long, but I 'm glad it turned out okay :)

ozmissage April 20 2010, 03:22:33 UTC

This is stunning. The voice, the details---all of it. This is miles better than anything the show has ever given us, could ever hope to give. Amazing fic.

blackmamba_esq April 20 2010, 04:17:52 UTC

Thank you :) You know I'm kind of on the outs with this show right now, but writing this reminded me why I used to like it so much.

djarum99 April 20 2010, 03:37:05 UTC

Whoa. That was amazing, and yes, better than the show itself. Every word is perfect, the formatting is masterful, and the whole thing is what I see going on behind Demetri's eyes.

*applauds*

blackmamba_esq April 20 2010, 04:18:18 UTC

Thank you! I'm so glad you liked it :)

pennythepants April 20 2010, 06:05:26 UTC

Powerful, beautiful, clever, haunting. This is absolutely great. Loved it :D

blackmamba_esq April 21 2010, 02:35:33 UTC

Thank you!

keenan24 April 20 2010, 09:08:10 UTC

Wow, this is so eerily beautiful. the melancholy, cynicism and mostly desperation is so vivid and relatable even though we cannnot fathom (and hope we'll never get the chance to) what Dem's going through.
I love the workings of his mind and how he falls into a schyzophrenic habit of viewing the rest of his existence in a greyish/black spectrum.

It only makes me even more embittered toward the show because it could have been a marvelous and complex character study instead of an ersatz rooting itself in sensationalism, that can only get you so far.

Thanks for the wonderful piece.

blackmamba_esq April 21 2010, 02:36:22 UTC

Ah, I know how you feel. It was actually hard for me to edit this because I'm so blah about the show right now. But I'll always love Demetri :)

Thanks for reading!