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FIC: Suzie Drabbles

Jul 20, 2009 22:47

So I spent all weekend playing snobby art critic in drabble land while having no idea how to write a drabble myself. misswinterhill gave us drabble meta here. Well, I think I fail at the twist, and I'm not so sure about the telling a complete story bit. Anyhow, here are three Suzie drabbles that I wrote as a result of the weekend and missing not one but TWO ( Read more... )

tw: tosh, tw: suzie, tw: jack, fic

Comments 24

taffimai July 21 2009, 03:10:14 UTC

Oh my god, I love Suzie so much. These are great.

“You want my opinion on your leadership skills, or the artistry of your tongue?” Suzie threw another smoked almond in the air and caught it with her own.

Okay, I actually laughed out loud at this line.

blue_fjords July 21 2009, 05:05:21 UTC

Hee, that's the only one I introduced humor into. Good to know it worked; thanks for commenting!

kel_reiley July 21 2009, 03:27:32 UTC

love the last one, and i think it fits pretty well into 'my' idea of a drabble

the 2nd one needs tightening up, but the ending was brill! :D

the 1st was too much like a snippet rather than a drabble - delving into suzie's mind, it needs more exploration, it didn't come to a conclusion that wasn't already there at the start (does that make sense?)

blue_fjords July 21 2009, 05:02:41 UTC

Thanks, kel. :) Yes, that does make sense; I can see that. You've cleared up some "snippet" vs. "drabble" confusion as well! Sweet.

I may revisit the second one at some point; Suzie/Tosh being my favorite non-Jack/Ianto pairing and I've had the idea of Suzie helping train Tosh in my head for a while now. Jack can still do the guns.

I was most unsure about the third one, ha! Glad you liked it!

kel_reiley July 21 2009, 05:22:58 UTC

suzie/tosh training fic? I APPROVE!

thrace_adams July 21 2009, 03:44:00 UTC

*giggles* Oh Suzie is good isn't she??? These were really good!

blue_fjords July 21 2009, 05:06:20 UTC

Thanks! Suzie could not be denied! :)

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blue_fjords July 21 2009, 10:43:22 UTC

Yeah, leaving aside the post_COE for a bit was good. Glad you liked!

choccy_grl July 21 2009, 07:02:21 UTC

I liked the last one best. I don't know about the technical aspects of drabbles. The one's I seem to like are one's where you can read them alone without feeling like you are just reading a bit of a story but equally you are curious about what is happening either side of the drabble.
Also I think they need to be quite punchy, minimum words for maximum effect.
But don't listen to me cos I can't write a drabble for shit, I put too many words everywhere - this story http://choccy-grl.livejournal.com/11480.html was originally meant to be a drabble - hah told you I suck.

blue_fjords July 21 2009, 10:58:29 UTC

I think your description of a drabble is spot-on. I'll go check out your story after work.

The word count is very difficult, but this time around I found it was easier to cut the superfluous words. I've had around 125 before, and you lose so much clarity when you have to cut so many!

Thanks for offering your thoughts!