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blergdeblah

Change in Luck

Feb 19, 2010 19:15

Wheee!!! My first story! Now, to warn everyone, this is a draft that's undergone only minor editing. I'm hoping to come back to it with a fresh set of eyes in a day or so, see if I can fix any glaring issues. All in all, though, I'm pretty pleased with how it turned out. Main concern I have is that it doesn't flow very well, since it skips ( Read more... )

hanna is not a boy's name, fanfic

Comments 17

niannliairsan February 20 2010, 05:13:30 UTC

Ha. I squeaked when Ringo cussed.
I liked it, a lot. A bit of fluff here and there which is just so awesomely awesome and good wording (cacophony is, in my opinion, the third best word in the world) and you set the moods well. And I love that it's nice an long, too.

blergdeblah February 20 2010, 16:58:39 UTC

Glad you liked it! (Out of curiosity, what do you think the two best words are?)

niannliairsan February 20 2010, 18:54:48 UTC

Psychosomatic and Incarnadine, then comes Cacophony.

0armoredsoul0 February 20 2010, 05:27:23 UTC

I was so scared.
I mean, not just scared, TERRIFIED.
Worried. Panicked.
The mere thought of Hanna hurt or in trouble had me in this crazy frantic tizzy, and I kept PRAYING "..." would make it in time.
Losing Hanna is simply a non-entity in mind. It can NOT happen.
And that little touch of Hanna/"..." there at the end had me going super duper "DAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAW~!"

No worries, Hanna, you got a butt load of lovers just waiting for the dimension barrier to collapse, darling.
^^

blergdeblah February 20 2010, 16:59:28 UTC

No worries! He's okay!

Thanks for the kind words! :)

suxike June 1 2010, 23:21:00 UTC

He does indeed! XD

THIS IS WHAT I WANT TO DO TO YOU/THIS FIC. chambergambit February 20 2010, 05:32:23 UTC

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Re: THIS IS WHAT I WANT TO DO TO YOU/THIS FIC. blergdeblah February 20 2010, 16:57:40 UTC

*blushes* Aw, thank you! :)

stupid_n00b February 21 2010, 20:48:41 UTC

MAN THIS FIC IS AWESOME. I especially liked how you explained the whole "elipses doesn't like the rain" thing. I was wondering about that.

and also that side story with Worth and Conrad was so cute :B <3 <3 And Elip and the jealousy.. haha so cuute.

Uh, the only thing I was wondering was, did Hanna ever put his clothes back on after the sex scene? I didn't see it mentioned so I imagined him walking down the street stark naked. Which is good too :P

blergdeblah February 22 2010, 02:45:15 UTC

Glad you enjoyed! :)

I did write in Hanna getting dressed again, but I mentioned it in passing so I can see why it was missed. And looking back, the way I wrote it might be a bit unclear. Will have to fix that! (Although public nudity Hanna might be more interesting. Hmmm...)

potatocannon February 22 2010, 05:15:22 UTC

AHHH~
THIS IS AMAZING <3
I loved every minute of it, I was even feeling worried for Hanna and hoping that he was okay XD