SGA FF: But I'll be close behind (John/Rodney, PG-13)

[black_eyedgirl]

Title: But I'll be close behind
Fandom: Stargate Atlantis
Pairing: John/Rodney pre-slash
Rating: PG-13
Genre: Drama/Fluff
Length: 1,700 words
Disclaimer: All belongs to Martin Gero and others not me
Spoilers: Specific reference to Trinity, could be set any time post that.
Summary/AN: Rodney can't always do the impossible, and he's getting a little

Comments

[scififreak]

A good first fic. The banter seemed especially believable. You're right, though, it could totally be friendship fic, but I read it as pre-slash. But it could go either way.

[black_eyedgirl]

Thank you. And I know, it's the pre-slashiest of pre-slash. I just wanted to check I could get the voices okay before I tried anything too fancy! So I'm glad you liked the banter :-)

[hieronymousmosh]

Nice! I love the banter and the interaction certainly seems believable to me :)

[black_eyedgirl]

Aww, thank you! I'm glad you liked it. (And your icon made me laugh - I was watching Rodney in that episode today actually)

[skeddy_kat]

I liked this. You did a nice job of capturing a bunch of things I think, but can't really articulate. I liked the way you handled the dynamics of their relationship. :)

[black_eyedgirl]

Well, I've been thinking about those things pretty intensely the past few days :-) If by things you mean the demands on Rodney - the "if you fail it's a huge problem but if you succeed, well why wouldn't you?". I was watching The Pegasus Project, M&MM, AND thinking about Trinity. It turned into a whole musing-thing!

I'm really glad you liked, and thanks for saying so :-)

[ozsaur]

Good dialogue! I really couldn't tell this was your first fic. Well done.

[black_eyedgirl]

Oh now that's a good compliment :-) Thanks!

[plsteward]

The Rodney-voice was pretty much spot on. I would have loved to know what the crisis was, but that's just me, it's not needed for the story you're telling. The begining of the end was more than a bit confusing to me, there isn't enough description to get John talking to Rodney so I'm left wondering how he went from just entering the lab to standing next to Rodney & talking.

But I do love it that Rodney sees himself going out in flames with John... which is kinda how I hope it all ends, or maybe with them growing old together, but still, togetherness is my kick. I so loved this.

[black_eyedgirl]

Ack, it does indeed seem that John starts talking to Rodney when half-way across the room and doesn't move... See, this is why I should hand things to other people to read before posting. *I* knew where he was... And yes, I did know I was cheating with the crisis - my science knowledge is not high. There was a need for a burst of energy, but beyond that...

Thanks for saying the Rodney-voice was okay. He was harder to write than I thought he would be. And, yup, absolutely, togetherness out in flames :-) (I actually like growing old together too, but Rodney is not one of nature's optimists...) Thanks again for the comment, especially the con-crit.

[plsteward]

Wouldn't worry too much about the jumping, I'm just one of those weird folk who see things as they read & thus need to have the steps laid out & to have every little thing detailed for me to understand where they are.

As for crisis... they did just blow out the ZPM, so anything could work like say they need to place one last databurst or someone needs to get to the Milky Way right then, or there's a new space gun that needs a bit of a boost, or anything short of the shield or cloak. But like I said it wasn't needed, this was a fic about two guys who are almost ready to step out of the closet together & how close they are to being married or at least very co-dependant.

But yeah, over all, you can so write for this ship & I'm ready to demand more if it weren't so hypocritical of me.