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December 22nd

Dec 22, 2010 11:00

Title: Fraternity
Author: hwister
Summary: Shisui committed suicide and everyone believed it all too easily. Another look at ItaShi and the Shisui loyalists. Inabi POV. Oneshot.
Notes: Rushed because I'm an idiot. Typing away frantically before my plane arrives and I'm whisked off to non-civilization. Not edited so be nice, please! Happy holidays!

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fanfiction, advent calendar 2010, ch: shisui uchiha, ch: itachi uchiha

Comments 11

rot_chan December 22 2010, 19:12:54 UTC

I thought this was so cool, how you told a great story from the perspective of Inabi and Shisui's friends. The entire story was very interesting, and I liked all the descriptive language and little details. I especially liked how you conveyed the feelings of a fading friendship so well, and how you characterized Itachi from Inabi's point of view so the reader almost has to dislike him. :)

hwister December 24 2010, 07:07:42 UTC

Thanks! "So cool" is a compliment that will never get old.

I typically love to skewer stuff so, yeah, Inabi POV.

morena238 December 23 2010, 00:03:12 UTC

I loved this ♥ words can't even express how much

hwister December 24 2010, 06:48:49 UTC

Thanks! :)

Love you for this advent calendar fest.

ronsard December 23 2010, 02:26:38 UTC

Delicious bystander fic is delicious ♥ Got to say, I don't and have never known any dudes IRL who have friendships like this. If this is true, it would improve my opinion of the male sex exponentially. Caring enough about your friend's first girlfriend to draft "welcoming" speeches? I can only wish that were true.

Though I have to wonder... are these the same dudes who came to interrogate Itachi about Shisui's death? They have the same names... if so, wow, Shisui has old-ass friends. Yashiro in particular is like 45. He's older than Fugaku. Just imagine him reenacting a boy band with the kiddies x_X

hwister December 24 2010, 06:48:39 UTC

OHGOD I FAIL. /horrorface Note to self: research characters before writing them.

I assumed they hero-worshipped Shisui enough to be possessive. (To be honest, I asked my brother about this, since he's plainly a male-thug stereotype. Conversation went like: "What if your leader outed himself?" "We beat him up." "What if he left you for a man?" "We beat him up." I had to embellish.)

theirempires December 23 2010, 09:39:34 UTC

Oh ffff, I don't know who to like or dislike in this. It feels like Shisui's just a rag doll being pulled around (which is annoying but totally understandable), what with Itachi being almost despicable with his cruel method by which he steals Shisui away, and Inabi&friends allowing anger to take over better judgment. Gah, I think this story really hit me hard somehow -- probably mostly on the subject of loyalty. I mean, in an ItaShi fic, there's always the question of loyalty, but I have this personal issue with the subject of loyalty between friends, and this fic seemed to raise a monster inside me that made me feel Inabi's anger, his pain, his fear of being left behind. It was so palpable, heck I'm still reeling a bit at the shock of how much I'm affected by this fic. IT'S ALSO NOT FAIR HOW PERFECT SHISUI AND ITACHI ARE, INDIVIDUALLY AND THEN A;SLDKFJ WHEN THEY'RE TOGETHER, IT'S LIKE THEY'RE UNTOUCHABLE. I guess it says something about me that I relate with Inabi the most out of everyone B( But seriously, just who is the villain in ( ... )

hwister December 24 2010, 07:04:10 UTC

Itachi is the villian, for Inabi. But we know better. :)

It was made to rankle but, I dunno, the harsh truth is that a lot of homosexuals feel like that and, uh, I wanted to bring it out in fic without the sugarcoating.

Keep the bullies in character! They're mean and petty and terrible, but they care about their own. DX

Whoa, sorry to raise up your issues. I just really wanted a POV where, as you say, everything's skewed: Itachi's the villian, the "bullies" have feelings, Shisui's not as good a friend as he is in most fics, etc. If it helps, I became a little invested myself, and angsted out on the friendships I grew out of or was left behind in.

Thanks! Spice girls, of course. ;)

theirempires December 24 2010, 09:26:46 UTC

Looking back, I'm ashamed that my last comment was so violent. Sorry, I'm not usually like that >_>

♥

venusian_eye December 25 2010, 18:07:21 UTC

This...

Oh man. I want to puke. In a good way. IS THAT POSSIBLE? I'm trying to come up with an appropriate analogy for my extremely visceral responses to the sheer beauty of your prose, the ingenuity of your observations about human nature, and all I can come up with is "puke". ;_; Forgive me.

Suffice to say that this was gorgeous and I loved it. ;;;;;;