Bones Fic: Losing My Religion~ Part 6

[bite_or_avoid]

Thursday does not find him in his normally jubilant mood. What with having nearly lost his mind and all.

The only saving grace was Olivia working the graveyard shift last night; he has no clue how he would have explained making an even more complicated mess of things.

A mess that culminated in the necessity of a cold shower and a handful of

Comments

[birdfromashes]

I have to admit, as much as I don't like to start reading stories until they're finished, Rose's obvious respect for your writing got me really interested...

Sooo, I started reading this story and suddenly I found myself at 'chapter 6' already, eager for more... and just like that, you got yourself another reader :)

I can see why Rose loves your stories...
You have a great writing-style that captures and holds my attention, a structuring that makes reading feel like I'm actually watching scenes (while reading Booth's mind at the same time), and most importantly, I love the way you treat the characters.
I really enjoy the 'Booth narrative', because you are very good at showing us how the small things that Brennan does unconsciously, tug at his heartstrings.
For me, that's the most interesting thing in your story: the way he picks up on subtle changes (in glances, in moods, in attitude) and reacts to them.

I hope you'll continue the story soon!

PS: I wish it was your Olivia in canon, instead of HH's Hannah...

[bite_or_avoid]

Wow, thank you so much for the awesome comments! I'm really glad that you're enjoying my characterizations. I feel like Booth as we've come to know him, would pick up on all those things. He wouldn't want to, would want to ignore what he's seeing because it's easier to not pay that close attention to her. But I don't buy for one second that he would ignore her pain, or throw away their friendship by neglecting it, no matter how much he wants to move on. That is actually my biggest peeve of this season; how he's not even her friend anymore.

It's really funny how many people like Olivia. I feel like sending HH a message that says "See? It's not so hard to write a likable character, even when she's standing in the way of a core 'ship."

Thank you so much for the comments!

[huronia]

Thank you for this wonderful chapter. I have gathered from some comments you have made that S6 is messing with your writing mojo. S6 is most definitely messing with my viewing pleasure, but it's fics like this that give me hope that Show might still be saved (not that HH is listening to you. If he was, his SO would be much more interesting and Booth would at least be recognizable). All that to say, please keep going because this is just excellent.

I really admire your turn of phrase. This line got me in particular: the desire to know her again is a tight fist around his heart. That one line says so much about what he really wants and about the scars he carries when it comes to Brennan.

And I love your last line. This is a dangerous path to walk, but you write Booth so well that there is nothing squicky about what he is feeling. Job well done. Looking forward to more.

[bite_or_avoid]

Thank you very much for the kind words. I really feel like this is the path Booth would, and should be walking, were he being written IC. Their relationship, and his feelings, are both so much more complex than what the show is allowing them to be.

I'm so glad you're enjoying this.

[drphungus]

Ugh, this is just what the doctor ordered. Can you please go back in time and write season 6, please? Great tension between the two of them while they are still in character, and the sense of not-knowing if they will ever work it out, and maybe being ok here (because Olivia is already a hundred times more interesting and just plain better than Mary Sue Burley).

Looking forward to another update before the fallout of ED awesomeness on Thursday!

[bite_or_avoid]

Thank you so much for the comments! I wish I could write Season 6, lol. I feel like they're really missing a goldmine of opportunities, which could be explored even with Booth being in a relationship. And don't even get me started on Hannah.

I'm so glad you're enjoying this :D