Snippet in search of a story: temporarily-in-a-female-body!McKay invites Sheppard over to experiment

[bironic]

Ugh. My ability to write has been missing since July. I thought it had come back last night, when I finally wrested the first half of this from my brain, but it went away again. So, here -- have half a story I've been wanting to write for a while, in the hope that posting it will nudge me closer to revival. The first 700 words are actual story

Comments

[anatsuno]

I like what you have written already, but yeah, if you enjoy the fast pace of the summary maybe you need to go from there, just adding a sentence here or there, a piece of dialog, and trying to keep it condensed to the speed where you still find it fun?

(I find it fun) :D

[bironic]

I seriously sat there for 3 hours unable to bridge the story from the beginning pace/tone(s) to where I wanted it to go. So finally I gave up and sketched out the rest. Sigh. I don't know if I'll be able to do it properly now that it's at least come out in this form. Maybe another idea will come along and I'll be able to write it as quickly as I wrote this summary? Swiftness seems key.

[almostnever]

I'm glad you posted it even in outline-and-a-scene form... it's fun! *\o/*

[bironic]

Oh, I'm glad in return. Thanks. ♥

[deelaundry]

In reading, I was clipping along happily until the BLAH BLAH, and then I was like, "Whoa, I totally forgot she said the last bit was summary," and now this is a run-on sentence but I don't care.

I like what you've got. : )

[rubynye]

An idea:

End scene with John crawling over to Rodney. Start next scene with John obviously having been playing with Rodney's breasts for awhile, commenting on them. From there on in it's just an elaboration of your (gigglesome) summary. :)

[alpheratz]

I was actually really amused by the story draft part. It made me giggle a bunch of times.