The Force of Destiny - Ch. 3

[railise]

Title: The Force of Destiny, Chapter 3
Author: railise
Rating: PG-13
Pairings/characters: Allan, the Outlaws, Florrie (OC), other OC's
Word count: 2538
Spoilers: While this alters the end of S2, there are still minor spoilers for the whole run of the show, including S3.
Summary: The gang tries to rescue a Locksley girl from Nottingham Castle.
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Comments

[hippie_girl_31]

I really love how well you got into Allan's head here. I'm sorry to say that I have the hardest time getting into his head when I write. He and Djaq are probably the most complex of all the characters (at least to me) and though I try, he always manages to elude me.

What was so great about Allan here was that he had that level of maturity that he seemed to have acquired on the show by the start of S3, but he still maintained that wonderful humor that Marian's death and the absence of Will and Djaq seemed to have taken from him. It was the best of classic Allan combined with a new understanding and self-awareness that was lacking before. And the fact that his new interest in Kate seems to outweigh any fleeting ideas about a quick roll in the hay (sorry for the crudeness, lol. I couldn't think of a more apt term.) is perfect evidence of that

[hippie_girl_31]

PS. I forgot to say in my previous comment that I was impressed with the fight scene here. I find that fight/action scenes are generally a challenge to both read and write because everything going on often ends up seeming either stilted or muddled. But yours flowed really nicely and swiftly and I found myself able to follow the action perfectly. ;)

[railise]

Sorry it's taken me so long to respond-- busy, busy couple of weeks, and I keep starting comments (in several places), getting distracted, and forgetting to finish them... *sigh* Anyway. :)

It honestly surprised me how easily Allan came out; when his thoughts started jumping onto the page, it really caught me off-guard. :D Someday, I think I might try to tackle a more in-depth piece with him, but I want to make sure I really have the right idea for it, first.

I'm glad to hear the fight scene worked! I have a hard time reading them sometimes because, as you said, they can get really muddled-- and I was worried that I'd pared it down too much. The ever-awesome mylogiceatsyou, who beta'ed as I wrote, gave me the thumbs-up on it, but I still tend to worry, since she and I practically share a brain half the time, lol.