This is something I just wrote

[bhjimbo]

You're losing seconds as you breathe
time flies by in flocks
but dont fret or worry so
don't live life by the clocks

Life is a journey, open road
not taken by a train
but a midnight convertible car ride
in the opposite lane

It can be fun or dangerous
the person will decide
disease drugs old age
murder suicide

Jim

Comments

your punctuation doesn't even make sense

[anonymous]

GAGS.

Re: your punctuation doesn't even make sense

[bhjimbo]

And who are you to critique me? Why don't you critique faulkner or eliot for using incorrect punctuation? I am in now way comparing myself to them, but that insult has no value here. It's poetry. It's about expressing yourself. There are no punctuation rules. Do you understand that? This is not seventh grade grammar.

Re: your punctuation doesn't even make sense

[lord_voncaro]

Now I don't want to start anything but honestly, why the hell would you post a reply like that. Even if you didn't like it, it's fucking art and isn't meant for you to criticize. If this poem is so terrible that it makes you physically "GAG," fine, I'm sorry. But why the fuck would you find it necessary to leave a pure-hate comment. In fact, if you hate Jim or his poem so much, why are you even reading his damn livejournal? If your angry with him, than move on. If you just hate him for no reason, get a life. But don't sit around posting little immature comments about how you think he is a bad poet.
And punctuation...honestly??
First of all, it's the goddamn internet and I hardly doubt anyone is always perfect.
Now that aside, IT'S A FUCKING POEM!!!!
Poems are not at all meant to be perfectly structured. That defeats the whole purpose. So yeah. I've said what I wanted to.
It just makes me mad that someone (anonymously of course) would say that about anyone's expressive nature.
So yeah.

Re: your punctuation doesn't even make sense

[landolaura]

CHODES