"Silk & Twisted" Chapter 06: Madame Bovary

[beyondthemoor]

Series Title: Silk and Twisted
Story Title: Madame Bovary
Author: Moor
Rating: M
Disclaimer: I make no claim to “Avatar”.

A series of drabbles, one-shots, and other shorts all relating to sex, in one way or another. This round: Zutara.
NIGHT IN THE EARTH KINGDOM...
The plays are definitely getting longer, despite the ordinance, the Fire Lord groused

Comments

[firewox]

:D that was good very good

[beyondthemoor]

Thank you! :D

... but seriously, I know it needs work. What part sucked most? :D

[firewox]

eh...I just feel for the carriage driver and his animals X3

[beyondthemoor]

XD In my fics, someone's always suffering. It seems like a bad habit of mine! ^^; hahah

[seniya]

and that wasn’t even mentioning the bursts of fire he prayed he’d imagined…

Mwhahaha! I loved it! Who knew, who knew.

[beyondthemoor]

Thanks! :D (I think some parts read a bit awkwardly though-- is it just me, or did you notice anything like that in there?) ^^;

(PS: I think we all knew. ^_~ )

[seniya]

I'll tell you this, we writers, poor artistic souls, tend to see things in our works that no one else does. No worries, it read fine.

[beyondthemoor]

*relieved* Thanks! :D

[fani]

Holy cow, all the literary references... I'm...shocked...really graceful though. Love it

[beyondthemoor]

Shocked in a good way (impressed), or in a bad way (OMG SPIDER SHIT REPULSIVE!) ? XD (Seriously... um, is there anything that's standing out overmuch in a bad way? I went over it several times before I posted it, and I just couldn't get it to read the way I wanted, but can't put my finger on what's bugging me about it.) ^^;

Thanks for the compliment. :)

[fani]

Impressed shocked:D no, nothing stands out too much it's just I've never read something so poetic...

[beyondthemoor]

Really? Geez... ^^; I can't seem to get comfortable with it. I really appreciate the comments, though! : )

[renagrrl7]

in case you needed another vote of confidence, i really like this story, too. it really didn't need any fine-tuning, but since you asked for it, i hope my comments help! let me know if you'd like me to eyeball it again...

[beyondthemoor]

Your comments really helped me figure out where to add a bit more description/background, and improved the overall 'flow' of things; I've already re-uploaded the 'beta-d' version and am MUCH happier with it now! :D

Thank you so much for your help!!! ^_^

[loveroftheflame]

I noticed you added me as a friend... I am repaying the favor. :DD Now we just have to read and concrit eachother's fics... lol!

[beyondthemoor]

Hihi! And thank you! :D I'd love to concrit your work, if you ever need a spare set of eyes on it! ^_^ (I just ask for 24-48 hours so I don't rush & miss anything glaring.) ^_~