Whoo! Het.
Probably in need of a beta, since I wrote it in a possessed fit at 4:30 in the morning because the bunny wouldn't leave me alone.
I'm gonna call it R. The pairing is hopefully guessable, but I don't actually use the names 'til the end in the fic so I don't wanna use them in the post yet.
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Teza. I still have yet to
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2-minute beta!
...and lays there for awhile in heavenly silence...
'for awhile' not necessary, could nix the comma after silence probably.
She seemed so earnest and so eager, and yet ... could it mean anything like what it had meant to him?
Slightly awkward. Maybe split earnest/eager sentence and mean anything sentence.
There's something giddy in the grin he can't suppress as relief washes over him.
Maybe this is more a matter of personal pref, but I think it would work better if relief washes over him was split off and made a seperate sentence. I like short, powerful sentences.
That's all that jumps out at me.
You're getting good with your short fic, y'know. XD
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*scurries to tweak*
Thanks for beta!
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The only other Malcolm/Hoshi I wrote was 'Rose Among Dandelions' which is a Malcolm POV character study kind of a piece -- I like it, but it is more UST than actual ship, at least from a mutuality perspective.
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/1441974/1/Rose_Among_Dandelions
It is also on fanfiction.net. Er. Sorry about that.
It has been a long time since I had time or inclination to fic! It's nice that the old stuff is still picking up interest now and again.
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