More fanfic: Trapped II

[bellasianna]

Title: Trapped II
Characters: Gwen, Owen, Jack, Tosh, Ianto, Rhys, Dav
Summary: Set a short time after chapter 1. Gwen and Owen are up to their old tricks but a night out for the Torchwood team brings an unsettling encounter for Gwen.
Rating: PG-15 for implications of slash and language.

Comments

[apsik]

What did guilty look like? Ohh, I liked this line. Some abstract thinking is always good in a story... or maybe it's just me? ;)

Oh,a nd if I may add something that kinda spoilt this chapter for me... this line:

But Rhys didn’t know about retcon and to him his friend had had too much to drink.

I don't know, it's just felt like too much, an unnecessary sentence. Am I making sense here? And please don't think I'm trying to be a picky bitch, I just like this story and this particular sentence stood out as an unthought through one.

*off to read more*

[bellasianna]

Not picky at all hon, constructive criticism is most welcome :D
You have a good point!

Thanks for reading :D