This is okay for a first fic, but "bohemians," "t-cells," and "the loft" should not be capitalised. Also, you might want to work on your characterisations. Both Roger and Mimi are a little OC.
Thanks for the info. I always assumed that they were capitalised, as a lot of other fics I read prior to writing this had them that way. And sorry for the OOC Roger and Mimi. Hope they're more in character as the story progesses.
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