It's only a ride

[beldarzfixon]

It’s only a ride, and soon it will stop

Comments

[lrig_rorrim]

This was super - the lead-up to the last paragraph was perfect, with all the details in the right places. The last paragraph was a spin in an unexpected direction but felt perfectly at home, and that surreal feeling felt super real. Well done!

[beldarzfixon]

Thanks! This is high praise coming from you, my looking-glass friend! =)

[halfshellvenus]

That final paragraph was perfect-- unexpected, and yet the parallels-turned-dark fit so well, including the refrain of the beginning.

I still love the Scrambler, and would ride the Tilt-A-Whirl if I ran into it more often. Rides with huge drops are too much now (the "down" goes from exciting to "Death! Death!"), and even smaller roller-coasters are wreaking havoc on my back. But I can still ride Thunder Mountain Railroad at Disneyland, and by God, I intend to in about 25 more days!

[beldarzfixon]

Thanks!

I last rode a roller-coaster about five years ago - one of the top-rated ones in the world, in fact - and it took me a couple of hours to recover. I'd love to be able to ride those again.

[kittenboo]

Wow! What an ending!

[beldarzfixon]

Thanks!

[jem0000000]

I've never gotten sick, but they always make it so the ground's over my head or behind my shoulder or something for several minutes afterward, so I really hated those spinning rides when my parents made me go on them.

That last paragraph fits beautifully, and feels very accurate (though thankfully I've never been in one that bad).

[beldarzfixon]

Thank you.

I know a lot of people like the feeling of disorientation the rides give, but I understand that doesn't mean everyone does.

[fourzoas]

Loved the way this moved and then abruptly shifted. I didn't know where I was for a second, and that was thrilling...

[beldarzfixon]

Thanks! Was hoping people would "feel" this piece that way.