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shamrockivy in beexsam

Fic: Hybrid Sam's Ponderings

Aug 24, 2009 22:37

I come bearing the next chapter and can happily say that it's certainly not work safe, due to being my first attempt at smut. I'd love feedback on the smexy parts to see if readers feel it's alright. I didn't want to overdo it, but I also didn't want it to be flimsy and pathetic. Anyway, I have two more chapters planned for this series and the next ( Read more... )

poster: shamrockivy, rated-m, holo!beexsam, spark sex, fanfiction

Comments 6

reflectionsotr August 25 2009, 14:14:48 UTC

You know that last line made me immediately thinking Bee and Sam getting a reformatted Ravage for a pet either on purpose or something like Sam going through a junk/storage room and coming in contact with Ravage's body only for sparks to fly and Ravage to become active once more only for his Decepticon and Soundwave subroutines to be missing and him to instantly imprint on Sam... Maybe getting a dog ( ... )

shamrockivy August 25 2009, 17:56:53 UTC

Thank you very much for the detailed feedback/ideas! And about the Bee and Sam getting busy...I don't want to spoil the surprise... -coughbutthenextchapterdealswiththatcough-

And I hadn't even realized the Ravage angle. In the movies he moves more cat-like, but the appeal is so very there...and Sam shouldn't always get his way..

Oh dear, I have more writing to do.

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Re: :D shamrockivy August 25 2009, 17:57:15 UTC

So glad that you do!

slvrbld747 August 26 2009, 02:12:45 UTC

Oooh, this is utterly awesome. I love the line where Optimus is the father who got the daughter-in-law that he wanted. Laughs delightedly, great stuff, I love the descriptions of the Spark bonding, though I do wonder does it leave a link? Something permanent like a telepathic, or empathic bond? Grins, I'm sure you'll let us know.

Heh, love the way Sam transformed the first time, the twins were in so much trouble. I loved the extended cuddle Sam needed to calm down, and Bee was so patient, sighs going dewy eyed in pleasure. This was just great all around. Thanks. -SB

shamrockivy August 26 2009, 03:08:38 UTC

You're very right, there'll be more on the effects of sparkbonding in the next chapter, which will also be in Ratchet's POV.

So very glad that it was up to par with the others! Trying something new in a chapter is always a daunting prospect.

Amazona slvrbld747 August 30 2009, 07:39:11 UTC

yeyyyyyyyy! a cybertronian chihuahua! XD maybe Mojo had contact with the spark O.o?. I love that Bee and Sam marriage, this are very cute! ^^