need a bit of help

[yuuzaiden]

Hi ,
It's me again and I'm in a bit of a jam.
I need a pair of fresh eyes to look over the beginning of chapter 12 of Sparks
(If you don't mind spoilers?)
I'm not sure who's on or currently keeping up with the fic at the moment, but I'd appreciate any help I can get.
Thanks

Comments

[yuuzaiden]

Oh thank you!!
I just didn't want to send it without knowing if you had time!!
I'll send it in a sec

[lady_foxfire]

You good or do you still need help?

[yuuzaiden]

If you'd like to help. I'd be happy to send you what I have...

[lady_foxfire]

Sure go ahead. I probably won't be able to look at it until tomorrow night since I have to work for a living. You should be able to get my email from my page.

Is this an edit or opinion only? I'm so so on editing.

[yuuzaiden]

okay.
great..
Opinion it you please.
I've got at least 2 other gals on editing.
~_~
Chapter 12 is the one I've been working toward since I started this fic...

[okami_myrrhibis]

If you want a 3rd pair of peekers, I'm here... myrrhibis on yahoo.

I look forward to an update, whenever it may occur!

[yuuzaiden]

Definatly appreciated!!
I'll send it right over!

[mmouse15]

hey, send it my way, too!

mitziDOTmouseATgmailDOTcom

Wait. You should have it already...

[yuuzaiden]

Sent!
I just need general opinion on characterzation..
any suggstions would be appreciated