Fic: That Still Small Voice: Chapter Seven

[lady_oneiros]

Title: That Still Small Voice
Rating: R
Disclaimer: Transformers and all related characters therein do not belong to me. No copyright infringement is intended.
Summary: Sam has been pulled deeper into the conflict than anyone realized.
Author’s Note: Fun with adjectives. Thanks a million for all the reviews! It means a lot to hear what you guys

Comments

Yay, a new chapter!

[obsoletereality]

Oh wow. I've been following this story even since you posted the first chapter and have loved absolutely every word of it. (Enough to delurk, even!)

Poor Ratchet; he's really not had a good time of it these last couple of chapters, and you gotta feel for him because it's probably going to get a heck of a lot worse before it gets better.

I think my favorite bit was 'Optimus lying motionless on the energon-stained ground, optics dark and Spark cold-Ratchet quickened his step, refusing to go back to that. It still hurt beyond measure, that despair and grief-the sight of Ironhide suffering the equivalent of human sobbing'. I hope we get to hear the story behind that; I'm really curious now

Re: Yay, a new chapter!

[lady_oneiros]

Hooray! I delurked a lurker! My life is now complete! MWUAHAHA! No, seriously, I'm glad you enjoy the story so much...it means so much to hear when people are reading it and what they think of it. I need to know what I'm doing right, and, more importantly, what I'm doing wrong.

I know. I'm torturing Ratchet. Moreso than I expected to do when I started the story, but he just offered himself up so nicely. And you're right. The torture of Ratchet is going to keep going downhill for a little while.

Ah, the flashback scene. Yes, I will explain it, but it will be far ahead in future chapters, I'm afraid. Sorry. ^_^ But in upcoming chapters, it will be expanded upon so you all can get a better idea of what happened before I explain it fully.

As for the less creepiness...don't relax just yet. ^_^; I hereby refer you back to the opening quote in Chapter Five(?) discussing the eclipse phase in bacterial infections. *sneaky*

Thanks for reading!

[mmouse15]

I agree with obsoletereality, this is just getting better and better. This is a wonderful continuation of the series. I'm looking forward to the next chapter. And my heart bleeds for poor Ratchet...

Concrit? I noticed one small error. First real paragraph of the section where Sam and Bee go into the hanger.
...but for the time being it was simply a sort of command room, a welcoming foyer for the few guests allowed, and its awkwardness lied in not having a decent purpose.
Should be lay, not lied. Hope it's OK to point this out...

[lady_oneiros]

Thank you very much! Glad you're enjoying it. And yes, I feel sorry for Ratchet, too. But he's going to have to go through a little bit more before I can make him feel better.

Ack! And I'm usually so finicky over the lay/lie thing. As a member of the grammar police, I must go commit ritual suicide. Thanks for pointing it out!

PLEASE, do not be afraid to point out my errors! As a part-time editor on campus myself, I don't consider pointing out mistakes as a personal insult, and it bothers me when people get so upset over it. The important thing: distance yourself from your writing. I can look at my own work and say: damn. That's horrible. They're right. Better go fix it. It took some work to get to that stage, but I seriously don't mind people pointing out weak areas. Thanks again for doing so.

[antiquixotic]

As always, chica, this was simply exquisite. There was little by way of creep-factor here, but it was layered with such emotional subtly and complexity of character that I didn't mind at all. I'm loving every word, actually, and I’ll gladly wait as long as you see fit for the other shoe to drop. ^_

[lady_oneiros]

Thanks so much!! I'm so happy that you are enjoying the story.

The relationship between Sam and Mikaela is actually the hardest element of this story to write. I'll sit and agonize and torture myself through the paragraphs on it, and I've deleted entire pages just because it didn't fit or sound right. Glad to see what I've done so far on it is acceptable. ^_^

The flashback scene will have an explanation, but it will be a while in coming, I'm afraid. Sorry!

Thanks for reading! I'll have more up as soon as possible.

[lady_oneiros]

*joins in the confetti throwing* I hope Sam comes up with something good, because I don't know what he's going to say either. ^_^; Thanks for reading!

[robin99]

/joins in with YAY Another chapter! :D
Lots of love for the Sam/Wheeljack & Sam/Bee conversations and the whole King Arthur and his Round Table scene... which is like the whole chapter!
Cannot wait to see what happens in Mexico.