Comments | beckyh2112: DegSep Ficlet

beckyh2112

DegSep Ficlet

Mar 15, 2005 13:32

This was written to exorcise some plotbunnies about Jean, Anderson, and the Merovingian. It evolved into a writing experiment - could I write a ficlet where the mood and Jean's actions revealed what he was thinking ( Read more... )

movies: the matrix, writing, rpg: degsep

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matrixrefugee March 15 2005, 18:26:48 UTC

The only off-spot that I could see was the Twins dialogue: they seem to speak in first person plural (the "We" form, as it were). Other than that little nit-picky bit, this is excellent stuff!

Re: the Sunglasses ::Grins:: Ooh, the Twins removed the lenses?? Naughty Twins!

And Ref refusing to go to the Merv is in character for her: she's uncomfortable with the idea, though of course... she certainly *doesn't* object to his going in to her rooms by night...

Makes me wanna play out what led up to this... *eeeevil grin!*

beckyh2112 March 15 2005, 19:06:53 UTC

What's this about the Twins removing the lenses?

I know I didn't intend for that to happen, but if you interpretted it that way, I'd like to fix it.

*smiles* This was a fun bit. And thank you for the tip on the Twins dialogue! I have no grasp on them.