[Avatar Fic] Party Guests

[beckyh2112]

So, orderofthelotus said they would post the reveal list for the latest exchange on Friday. It is now Saturday after my work-shift. There is no reveal list.

Given the general incompetence surrounding the exchange, I won't be participating next year, and I will be posting my entry for this year. Right now.

Title: Party Guests
Characters: Mai, Ty Lee, Li (OC),

Comments

[weirdlet]

Nifty- and utterly creepifying. I like the blend on Azula in this- these are *her* friends and no slippery unnatural monster is allowed to intrude on her perfect life by hurting them.

[beckyh2112]

Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it.

I think I'm finally getting a bit of a handle on Azula. You put it perfectly, too: *her* friends and no monster is allowed to intrude on her perfect life by hurting them. Emphasis on perfect - I get the sort of impression that Azula has to have things going the way she thinks they should go. See: her breakdown when Daddy is all "stay here and protect the kingdom while I go burninate".

[weirdlet]

*nod* That's where a lot of the shatterglass comes from, I think- things are out of order. They must be put in order. It's incomprehensible that things not be In Order and Fall Into Line. Dominion over the earth doesn't help if you can't keep it *stable,* and anything more informal than utter domination is messy and weak and undependable.

[ex_nuitsong]

This is quite... creepy, in it's own glorious way. I like the sense of duty that Mai feels for Ty Lee. I like Mai in general, I thought you wrote her EXTREMELY well. I also like Ty Lee's aura-reading and, at the end, Azula's warped concern for her friends.

I also commend you for the kuudou creature. Very well development. At first, I thought it might have actually been a creature in the Avatar world and then I read your Author's Note.

Great job indeed! I love this. I'm sure your giftee will love immensely!

[beckyh2112]

Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it.

The kuudou was fun to make up. *pets him* I really need to use him for an original story sometime. (Why do I seem to gravitate towards horror? Ah yes, because I've a taste for Lily Fair.)

[andromeda3116]

Very interesting. Is the Sea of Trees a reference to the Aokigahara forest in Japan? It sounded very familiar -- if so, awesome, if creepy, tie-in.

I love the creepy atmosphere, and the way that Azula is actually shaken by the spirit. It's got an almost Miyazaki-type feel to it, like this is a scene you might find in Spirited Away or something. I like it, a lot.

[beckyh2112]

Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it. And yes, it is. I've been wanting to use that since I discovered its existence.

Ooh, thank you for such a high compliment.

[spunspider]

wonderfully creepy atmosphere, but the characters owned this and i liked that a lot. azula's one of my faves and i dig the image of her party hostess!fail, it's so very azula. the conversation between mai and her cousin was also a nice add-on to the whole creepy monster thing.

[beckyh2112]

Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it. "but the characters owned this"?

[spunspider]

i meant that it was very atmospheric, but the characters managed to supersede that and make it primarily about them rather than the Big Bad, and i liked that. ^^

[gigabomb]

I like seeing the more human side of Azula here; in her own twisted way, she does care about Ty Lee and Mai, and I enjoy seeing that once in a while.

[beckyh2112]

Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it.

I really do think Azula cared for Mai and Ty Lee. However, I think she views what happened in "The Boiling Rock" as a horrible betrayal. She's a fourteen-year-old girl with serious control issues, so her friends going against her like that was just devastating.