Comments | beckyh2112: [Star Wars Fic] Return to Ord Mantell

beckyh2112

[Star Wars Fic] Return to Ord Mantell

Apr 27, 2010 15:13

Title: Return to Ord Mantell
Characters: Screw, Beni, Hakke Sixxo, Kihik'or, Talvak'or, Lintak'or (all OCs, all the time)
Word Count: 1000+
Rating: G
Summary: Screw takes his girlfriend and her kids to visit Ori'skraan.

( Return to Ord Mantell )

rpg: unsung heroes, writing, table: story_lottery, series: star wars

Comments 14

dunmurderin April 28 2010, 00:38:50 UTC

Another squee! I love it!

beckyh2112 April 29 2010, 14:44:06 UTC

Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it.

hedgehog39 April 29 2010, 13:47:51 UTC

Oh, Ho. Neat! I didn't know you were a SW ficcer as well. I like the conversational style you've got going here.

One thing I noticed is that the names came too rapid-fire to follow easily and I had to re-read those sections a couple times to figure out how many people there were, and who was who (and what species).

beckyh2112 April 29 2010, 14:43:51 UTC

I don't really write Star Wars as now and then write stuff from a Star Wars RPG I was in. Which has the unfortunate side-effect that I'm usually writing for other people who were in it, and thus don't bother to explain what's going on and who people are. >_>

But yeah, that is a problem and something I need to work on when writing stories.

hedgehog39 April 29 2010, 15:14:02 UTC

Tabletop or fourm/online?

beckyh2112 April 29 2010, 15:16:41 UTC

Online. It was a MUSH called Unsung Heroes.

I liked the system, some of the players drove me nuts, some of the other players I adored... Then real life happened and while I was gone, so did some major drama.

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lunatron May 1 2010, 14:46:49 UTC

I was a bit confused by this, but the ending is quite sweet, and my - the Empire doesn't really properly socialise their Stormtroopers, does it? Seems a lot of normal social interaction goes quite over Beni's head.

beckyh2112 May 1 2010, 17:39:07 UTC

Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it.

Well, properly socializing their Stormtroopers does seem like a lot of extra work for guys you just want to be soldiers and nothing else. *ruffles Beni and Screw* They're weirdo boys.

lunatron May 1 2010, 19:08:51 UTC

Yeah, the Empire has no reason to properly socialise its Stormtroopers... aside from the fact that, sometimes, they don't get shot by Rebels and survive to become civilians.

I wonder what all the clones running around does to the gene pool. >_>