This is a first

[beckerhateskids]

In every way. Yes, it's fanfiction, and I'm still very insecure about making it public. On the other hand I'm a little proud and also relieved because I was convinced I could never write something in English. But it came along quite smoothly, and since I've received a few very nice words about it I'll give it a go and step out of the anonymity of

Comments

[beruthielfrodo]

You shouldn't be anxious, my dear, it's great! =) *hugs*

Adrian hated that his body gave him away, that it said yes to every word. He tried to make his features look unaffected, but Edward knew him so well he could tell only by looking at his eyes what was going on inside of him. Maybe it was there where he had initially discovered the plan. Not in its entirety, but shapes of it, growing bigger and darker.
I especially like that part!

And Adrian suddenly knew that Blake was doing him a favour, because he wasn’t sure if he could’ve taken what would’ve come out if Blake had allowed himself to speak. The words would always remain unspoken, but Adrian realized with sudden despair that it would hurt even more to never have heard them.
That's my favourite part though. Almost heart wrenching sad. :(

[beckerhateskids]

Thanks, love. ♥ If you hadn't been so genuinely fond of it I wouldn't have had the guts to post it. :*

[beruthielfrodo]

Aww. I'm just glad I could help =) But you really should post the fic somewhere. Don't be afraid! It's so good, people will like it. ^^

[fireez]

That was you? Great job :). Even though it's quite a depressing fic. I knew you could do it!

[beckerhateskids]

Thank you very much. :) I knew you believed in me, but I didn't. ;)
And it is depressing, yes. But it only occurred to me after I wrote it how much so.

[skullsquid]

oh, my god, i love it.

this is so intense and i love the stormy characterization so much - i love how there's so much left unsaid and still with such clarity to its meaning; i struggle very hard with that and you executed it so well.

aghhhh agahh i love it i love it i love it. it was so sad and hopeless and almost guiltily hot, too. great job, you! i hope you write more. you should post this everywhere!

[beckerhateskids]

Thank you so very, very much. I'm SO relieved you like it, because from you it means the world. (Because you're so damn fucking GOOD, and I knew you'd tell me if it was crap - at least I hope so! XD)

And I'm relieved it came across just as I wanted it to. I'll surely write more, I couldn't stop now. ;)

Maybe I'll post it somewhere, but oh god, I guess I'll have to get drunk first. u.u

[skullsquid]

aw, shucks! this is about your praise, not mine <3

i enjoyed it a lot. i love the complexity of all the emotions you incorporated. so good!

post it, you doof.

[beruthielfrodo]

post it, you doof.
I second that! And I still have the plum liqueur... :D ;)

[beckerhateskids]

I take it as a compliment. ;)

Nope, it's German.

[beckerhateskids]

*lol* Go right ahead. Let's be friends anyway, we both know Billy, that should be enough of a reason. ;)

[marionetteblue3]

Late, but this is fantastic. You got the poignance perfectly. <3

Also, can I friend you too? :S I bring cookies. :D

[beckerhateskids]

Thank you very much! :)

Yeah, of course! Go right ahead! :)