BSG Fic - Reparation, 16/?

[becisvolatile]

Title: Reparation
Author: becisvolatile
Part: 16/?
Rating: NC-17
Pairings/Characters: Lee/Kara, Bill, Helo, Sharon, Sam, Leoben.
Word Count: 6600+
Category: Novella
Genre: Romance, Angst, Action with Romance, PWP, Drama
Archiving: The Fallout Shelter, Apollo/Starbuck Fan Fic, Beyond Insane all others please ask
Warnings: Language, violence, sexual content,

Comments

[becisvolatile]

I'm a little puzzled how Kara and Lee got back to being messed up, they seemed to be doing well.

Really? I mean, I sort of felt that the only thing they were doing was having really good sex. Then Kara almost realized she loved him and, going on track record, that's usually her cue to split and frak things up, y'know?

[becisvolatile]

Michael Stipe

As in REM? Not to my knowledge? Did he sing that? I don't doubt that it's been said before. I just remember my Opa counting my eyelashes and when I got older they got bigger in number. Now, in hindsight, I think he just guessed... but yeah.

I also liked the contrast between this sex scene where she stays clothed and the scene where Kara's all sprawled out nekkid in their rack after Sam is, umm, unsuccessful with her.

It is an interesting juxtaposition, no?

[elzed]

Oh, I love this fic so much. Caught this in the morning and had to email it to myself (I don't really LJ at work, way too risky imho) and read it surreptitiously instead of doing proper, serious, important work. Sigh. Such a pair of fuckups who need to stop messing about and get their act together!

Kara - just give in to the feeling, please. Because you're worth it (snigger).

And oh, Alpha Lee is so my favourite hotcakes.

“Can I have my towel?”

Helo’s grin grew a little as he leaned more heavily against the glass. “When I’m ready.”

“I promise you,” Lee’s voice cut through the dissipating steam of the bathroom, “That you are more than ready .”

Guh!

And:

“Yeah, well, I’m frakking the CAG; I figured it gave me a little wiggle room.” Lee dropped himself down onto the bed and propped himself up on his elbows to watch Kara wander around the room pulling on a shirt and an oversized pair of socks but not much else. “Also, for the record, I plan on frakking you solidly into tomorrow too, so you might want to rethink the panties. You

[becisvolatile]

(I don't really LJ at work, way too risky imho)

I agree, I mean your getting paid to work, not read teh pronz.

Have you ever done it?

Counting eyelashes? I'm not that patient. To be honest when I started writing this chapter I sat in front of a mirror and tried to count my own, but didn't get far. I mean, that's taking one's research just a little too far.

[grndr101]

Hm, how should I say this? To me Lee was OOC, his interactions with Kara didn't fit for me. Secondly, where is the emotion with Lee and Kara, I don't know, but there seems to be something missing. This chapter leaves me confused, like where are Kara and Lee at? Are you working on the bigger scheme(earth, cylons), not that I like the cylon basestar scenes or something.

I really like your fic, but I think this chapter lacked the strong scenes your other ones had. The eyelash counting part was brilliant though.

[latteaddict]

Hmmm. I was thinking about your comment and I would have to disagree. In the context of the 15 chapters proceeding this one, Lee is very in character and fits these circumstances which have been meticulously created over 74,000 words. Not an easy thing to do, believe me

[becisvolatile]

God, you're like the big sister I never had. You even called me "lovely".

Lee is in for the long haul. But in true Kara fashion, instead of accepting it, she just pushes Lee even harder.

I kinda figure that it's not until Kara realises how really real Lee is about his feelings for her that she realises just how much she'll lose if he dies because of her. And the understanding that his love might just be unconditional - despite the two chapters taking months to come out - has only happened over a couple hours of fic time... so she's still really reacting to the understanding that Lee was going to have her even if she was pregnant.

Just sayin'.

[becisvolatile]

Hm, how should I say this? Actually, I had no probeln with what you said and I can truly see how it was possible to feel that.

Obviously, since I wrote it, I don't 100% agree.

To me Lee was OOC, his interactions with Kara didn't fit for me.

Possibly not with what we know of Lee in canon, no, what he did and said didn't fit. But I really feel that as I've written him he's been working up to this point. Even in canon (as far as I can see) Lee is prone to fits of jealousy and uncharacteristic violence. I think you also need to allow for the shifting narrative. A lot of what we saw of Lee was coming from Kara's eyes - and I think what she doesn't see and doesn't realize is important. Lee's love is fact, it's Kara that casts doubt on it

[pinkhusky]

Now I'm probably going to count peoples eyelashes D=

Superb. Absolutely wonderful. Along with a really great, realistic plot, you get their voices JUST RIGHT and you are such a great writer as well. Someone could have the shittiest plot in the world and good writing would make it seem fantastic. Or they could have a great plot, but fail at writing. You're so lucky that you have the talent of both. I'm jealous ;3

What strikes me most about your fanfiction I think, is like I said before, how realistic it is. And how natural and real Kara and Lee seem. In most fanfics, they make Kara too whiny and too... WILLING to give herself over to Lee I think. And the way you make them dance around eachother... its just perfect.

Gah :] amazing. Can't wait for 17 ;] ♥

[becisvolatile]

You say the most flattering things, I'm just glad you're enjoying it. It means a lot to me that people just enjoy what I write. Everything else is just icing on the cake.