Nobody can ride your back if your back's not bent.

[beautyofgrey]

Comments

[beautyofgrey]

:D Thank you.

[solstice_singer]

I'm not sure what to say. This was incredibly powerful and moving. I would say every woman, young or old, should read this.

[beautyofgrey]

Thank you so much, that's an incredible compliment.

[whipchick]

This is so beautiful, and the rhythm throughout really sings.

One place stuck out for me - "dependent on a man who might grope me or rape me to stop or offer a tow." - the end of that line gets a little confusing structurally, took me a second look to get the meaning there.

Loved -
and you don’t need a clean skirt or a pretty face
to be a force of nature.

Awesome.

This totally reads like a great poem for performance, I hope you do! (And I'm heading off to click the audio, which may answer that question).

[beautyofgrey]

Thank you so much for the feedback! I struggled a bit with that line and meant to go back and add a couple of commas to help clarify *does that now*. And yes, this was definitely intended as a performance piece. :)

[kickthehobbit]

This is beautiful.

[beautyofgrey]

♥ Thank you.

[similiesslip]

OH, this made me cry so much. THIS is what I wish for my daughters.

It has taken so many years not to hear "don't do that, it's not lady-like" anytime I run, etc. I never want that voice to live in my daughter's head. This is so amazing, Grey. So...I just can't say. I love how you put it all together.

[beautyofgrey]

(((((Thank you))))) Thank you dear, that means so much to me. I am really grateful that I have a dad who taught me these things.

[eska818]

Amazing job. Your dad sounds awesome. :)

[beautyofgrey]

Thank you, and he is a pretty great dad. :)