"say a prayer backwards" - poetry

[be_themoon]

you guys I am in love with college and erasures and poetry and language and such things. I did an erasure and now have to wait for the original author's permission to post it. and I'm finally posting a poem I wrote about a month ago and wasn't sure about posting.

say a prayer backwards

Comments

[katakokk]

BETSY. YOU ARE SO AMAZING.

I love this poem!

and mean the same thing every time

you can mean to slip
not fall
not mean to fall
and slip

I love the paradox created by it, because the words are NOT the same. And, just, GAH. I love the contrast. :)

And the echo of the title throughout the poem, along with the singing mercy echo.

This is just so beautiful and I feel like it's meta in poetry form (which is doubly awesome, because meta alone is awesome), so yeah, this is AWESOME. ♥

[be_themoon]

Awwww, thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it. It is a kind of really meta poem, because I've been doing a lot of philosophy thinking recently and that tends to result in meta-poetry. O.o Thanks again! <3333

[zempasuchil]

ohhh, lovely. I can feel the vigor you're putting into this.

cut yourself jagged on words you didn’t even know you had
like saying a prayer
backwards
<3333

and

you can become your own antithesis
you can sing your own breakaway song
you can build your own mercy from the ground
The sound of those lines is great - parallel as well as the vowels in song/ground.

I like being your own antithesis too. It makes me think of, um, marx. but yeah.

<333333333 you

[be_themoon]

MAAARX. um. hee. thank you! it was partially a working out of stuff I was thinking about, so I guess you could say it's meta-poetry? I don't know. I <333333 you too! thank you!

[zempasuchil]

MAAARX INDEED <3 talk dialectics to me, baby XD
Meta poetry is good! it is very useful. My poetry teacher would talk about a poem as a machine, where you put an idea in and write about it and process it and at the end of the poem it resolves! or something like resolution.