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bb4eva

Passion of a Saint

Jul 08, 2009 20:48

Title: Passion of A Saint
Genre: AU/AU Ennis/Jack
Rating: NC-17
Disclaimer: The Characters of Ennis And Jack belong to the inimitable Ann Proulx. I am simply borrowing them for this story. No financial benefit is derived from this story.
Summary: This story is set at St. Augustine's. A pious Ennis is a Deacon hoping to become a priest, and Jack is ( Read more... )

ennis, passion of a saint, brokeback mountain, jack

Comments 43

annabuffy July 9 2009, 11:22:54 UTC

Glad that Fr. Martin made Ennis realize he is human. But, how can he resist Jack?

bb4eva July 9 2009, 15:19:05 UTC

Or how can Jack resist him?

suzysue2 July 9 2009, 12:20:55 UTC

Wow - an even hotter chapter than the first one! Loved the waterfall scene especially.

Looking forward the next chapter.

Sue

bb4eva July 9 2009, 15:32:07 UTC

Thanks, Sue.

The waterfall scene is actually based on a real waterfall that was part of the the monastery at a retreat I had visited once. As soon as I started this story, this scene just begged to be written.

chamilet July 9 2009, 17:35:54 UTC

SO glad to see an update to this so soon!!! HOT stuff!

If I may point out a few things?

""Yes. In fact, I think this group might be the thing to ever happen to you.”" Missing best.

"Begin the host deacon, it was natural that group members gathered to him," Being instead of Begin

"Jack’s eyes trailed the blond hair on his navel down to his crutch." crotch;)

chamilet July 9 2009, 17:36:35 UTC

Oh, and I loved Alma's appearance. So appropriate:)

bb4eva July 9 2009, 17:55:35 UTC

Fixed! Thanks.

Passion of a saint argentine65 July 9 2009, 18:06:18 UTC

Seven years Ennis has been hiding in this place, he is shy but I bet he knew best. Now, he found the devil: Jack and he can't resist. Wonderful long chapter. Thank you for sharing this. Martha

Re: Passion of a saint bb4eva July 9 2009, 18:28:31 UTC

Thanks for reading. And commenting!

It really makes one want to share. Now I feel bad for all the times I read stories and never commented. Like they say experience is the best teacher.

Funny thing is feedback helps the story move forward too. You'd be surprised how much the comments from the last chapter guided the way this chapter came together.

grlewis July 9 2009, 18:45:25 UTC

this is really good, but it leaves me somewhat uncomfortable to see ennis tempted so badly and even worse, seeing him give in to the desires. i am of mixed mind here. the scene between them is very exciting and very hot, and yet......

bb4eva July 9 2009, 19:15:53 UTC

I think you need to under stand my Inspiration for my Ennis ( ... )