Comments | batfic_contest: "In Vain" (Theme 70:"One Minute")

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"In Vain" (Theme 70:"One Minute")

Nov 17, 2010 12:05

Title: In Vain
Universe: DCU, Gotham Central-era
Genre: Drama
Rating: PG-13
Characters: Batman, mentions of Renee Montoya, Jim Gordon, and Two-Face
Word Count: 447
Warnings: Character Death, referenced violence
Summary: Bruce Wayne attends the funeral of someone he considered a very dear friend. This is an alternate ending to the Gotham Central " ( Read more... )

theme 70: one minute, character: bruce wayne, universe: dcu, character: two-face

Comments 6

lilacsigil November 18 2010, 07:57:23 UTC

Nooooo! This very much fits in the Gotham Central canon and mood, thought - the cops lived dangerous lives and died small, tragic deaths.

aural_stimulatn November 18 2010, 14:53:25 UTC

I may or may not have, (but deinitely did) get a little choked up while I wrote it. Saaaad. Thanks, I'm glad you thought it was a good fit!

lenaf007 November 20 2010, 21:20:36 UTC

Aww, *sniffle* I always have liked Renee. And Harvey would totally lose it if she got killed in front of him like that. I love the way this explores that possibility though, and it really shows Bruce's social awkwardness especially among the mourning. I don't think he ever quite got that down.

Very awesome piece!

aural_stimulatn November 21 2010, 02:57:42 UTC

Renee is probably currently my favorte character in the DCU. I always wondered how Batman would deal with losing her, and wow, this was really hard to write!

Thank you for commenting, and I'm glad it came off as realistic for you!

quiet__tiger November 28 2010, 21:31:24 UTC

Liked this a lot--I think you covered a lot of material in only a few hundred words.

alocin42 November 28 2010, 22:36:31 UTC

I agree with the comment that you covered a lot in a short fic - but it didn't feel overly rushed, so kudos for that! It was a good use of the brief wordcount to come in at the funeral and look back rather than working through it chronologically. And a poignant topic, with poor Montoya becoming another casualty guilty of not much more than living in Gotham - and Bruce as usual shouldering the guilt of another life lost. Good - if tragic - stuff!